Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

hello first of all we have three 3 data 2003 , 2006 , and lastly 2013 according to this graph the population is really vear addicted to fast food resturant on the basis of every day and on the basis of one or twice a month .

1. in the graph of every day there is much demand of 2003's people to buy and ate fast food . insted in 2006 and in 2013 thete is no much requried of it it has normal usage .

2.we can see if we go according to study we can get the data about approx 4% usage of fastfood in 2003 . means if we take 10% as 100% population then almost 40% are addicted to fast food .

3.but if taljk about onec or twice in a month then the scenario changes drasticly by seeing the data .

{in 2013 the people are more addicted to fast food by almost 35%}

{then 2003 people come by almost 30%}

4 at last we talk about 2006 they are not so addicted with eating fast food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally, presenting a very fragmented and superficial overview of the data. The student attempts to report on some categories such as 'every day' and 'once or twice a month', but the information is heavily confused and inaccurate. For instance, the claim that 'in 2013 the people are more addicted to fast food by almost 35%' misinterprets the data structure and fails to make accurate comparisons across the years provided in the bar chart. Furthermore, the format includes informal conversational elements like greeting the reader ('hello first of all') and unformatted bullet points rather than a proper academic report. The development of ideas is severely limited, and key trends in the chart are missed or incorrectly stated.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent manner. The text lacks standard academic paragraphing, instead breaking down into a disjointed list of numbered points and informal commentary, including bracketed fragments. There is no clear overall progression or logical structure guiding the reader through the visual data. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inadequately to link sentences and ideas together smoothly. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which year or category the student is discussing at any given point. Overall, the structural organization reflects a basic lack of control over the required format for an academic summary.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on conversational terms rather than precise academic language. Words such as 'vear', 'ate', 'insted', 'thete', 'requried', and 'onec' contain spelling and word-form errors that strain the reader's understanding. The student attempts less common vocabulary like 'addicted' and 'drasticly', but these are used inaccurately or inappropriately in the context of statistical data. There is a lack of flexibility and precision in describing trends, percentages, or categories from the chart, restricting the lexical range to a very simple level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence forms with frequent structural errors. There are numerous basic errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'there is much demand of 2003's people to buy and ate fast food' and 'if taljk about onec or twice in a month'. Punctuation is poorly controlled, and the inclusion of informal dialogue fragments further disrupts sentence boundaries. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and prevent the formation of complex, accurate grammatical structures.

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