Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

many People are eating fast food in USA from 2003 to 2013, however there is mentioned in flow chart that at what time people eat more fast food. less number of people eat fast food everyday. If we compare it with 2003 to 2006 than the ratio of people in 2003 is higher. Moreover, people consume fast food in every week their quantity is better. in 2006, more number of people have come at least once in week, compare to 2003, and 2013. Furthermore, major quantity of people came once or twice in month as in USA at least oneday in a month is belongs to fast food for people its quantity is greater than others. However, it has seen that from 2003, healthy number of people ate fast food and its ratio increased in 2006 but it reduced in 2013. But, overall it is still consumed in USA, so, it is the fast food that is eaten in USA from 2003 to 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the task by referencing trends from the chart, such as mentioning that a smaller number of people ate fast food every day and noting fluctuations between 2003, 2006, and 2013. However, the response only minimally addresses the prompt, misinterpreting the visual data in places and failing to provide a clear, coherent overview of the main features. The ideas remain limited and under-developed, resulting in a fragmented summary of the provided bar chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of information lacks a clear progression throughout the text. While some basic cohesive devices like 'however', 'moreover', and 'furthermore' are used, they are often mechanical and do not establish logical relationships between ideas. Additionally, the response lacks proper paragraphing, as all sentences are lumped together into a single block of text, making the overall structure difficult to follow and contributing to disjointed transitions between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying on imprecise phrases like 'major quantity of people', 'healthy number of people', and 'its quantity is better' to describe statistical data. There are noticeable word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, such as referring to percentages or proportions as 'quantities'. While the meaning is generally decipherable, the limited and strained lexical range restricts the precision required for an academic task report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple or awkwardly constructed complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing capitalization ('many People', 'in USA'), incorrect prepositions ('in every week', 'oneday in a month'), and faulty verb forms or agreements ('people have come at least once in week'). These errors occur regularly and frequently cause difficulty or strain for the reader.

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