Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph compares the proportion of people ate fast food among three different three years in usa.

Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of people who ate fast food once or twice a week it was maximum and who ate everyday the proportion of that individuals was minimum.

Looking at the bar graph in more details, first of all people who ate fast food very often it were less than 5% among three different years. Furthermore, in 2009 17% individuals ate fast food several times in the week and it was inclined by 4% percent in 2006 but again decreased and reached at 16% in 2013. The people who eat fast food once a week the proportion of those population were around 33% in 2003 and 2006. In 2013 it was declined by 6 to 7%.

Moreover, 30% people ate fast food once or twice a month in 2003, it was declined by 5% in 2006, but again increased in 2013 and reached at 35%. In addition, 13% people ate fast food a few time year and it was increased by 2% in 2006 and similar in 2013. The people who ate fast food never it was 5% in 2003 and declined by 1 or 2% in 2006 and 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the three years given in the chart. You have selected key data points, such as the highest and lowest frequencies of eating fast food, and attempted to track changes over time. However, some ideas are under-developed or contain inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention "in 2009 17% individuals ate fast food", whereas the chart clearly references 2006 rather than 2009, and your figures for certain trends require more careful checking against the visual data. To reach a higher level, ensure that all data points are cited accurately from the source chart and that comparisons are fully articulated without minor factual discrepancies.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

Your essay has a coherent overall arrangement, and you have made a clear attempt to structure the response into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific data. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty. Phrases used to introduce details, such as "Looking at the bar graph in more details, first of all" and "Moreover", feel a bit clunky, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in sentences like "The people who eat fast food once a week the proportion of those population were...", where sentence subjects dangle awkwardly. Paragraphing is present, but internal logical progression within paragraphs needs to be smoother. To improve, work on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensuring that your sentence subjects link seamlessly to your verbs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items and descriptive verbs such as "proportion", "maximum", "minimum", "inclined", and "declined". However, there are noticeable word-choice and collocation errors that prevent a higher score, such as writing "people ate fast food a few time year" instead of "a few times a year", and using "inclined" or "declined by 4% percent" where standard statistical terms like "increased" or "rose" would be more appropriate. Spelling and word formation are generally clear enough not to impede communication, but expanding your repertoire of precise lexical items for data description will help you achieve greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but it is hindered by frequent grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and clause structures, such as "The graph compares the proportion of people ate fast food", where a relative pronoun is missing, and "The people who eat fast food once a week the proportion of those population were...", which features a double subject error and plural-singular mismatch. Prepositional use and article supply also show recurring errors, for example, saying "in usa" instead of "in the USA". While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to keep the writing at this level. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence architecture and ensuring verbs agree correctly with their true subjects.

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