Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph chart shows information about fast food people who ate past 10 years 2003 to 2013 in the USA comperss others.this line graph about three yaers 2003,2006, and 2013 i will expline all information about this issue.

There are lines which is showing majoratic of people in chart higher number of once in week ate fast food at restaurants, In 2006 hiting almost 35% of people, 2003 is litte bite down of 2006 and than 2003 public are almost 30% ating fast food.Once or twice in a time percentage are seems like same, ervery day and never had a restaurants fast food are not loving, therefore a few times in years about 15% and 2003 had a litte bite seems down. In this case i understant that majorite of people loving food outside one tine in a week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s topic and mention several relevant categories, including weekly visits, monthly visits, and eating fast food only a few times a year. However, the response reports the data inaccurately or unclearly: for example, you say the 2006 weekly figure was “almost 35%,” whereas it is about 33%, and the 2003 figure is about 31%, not simply “almost 30%.” The key shift—once or twice a month becoming the most common frequency in 2013—is not clearly explained, and there is no well-developed overview of the main patterns. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum. Add a concise overview and compare the main categories accurately across all three years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the subject, followed by comments on several frequency groups and a concluding interpretation. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and the long second paragraph moves abruptly between weekly, monthly, daily, and yearly figures. Connections such as “In this case” do not make the relationship between the details clear, while “therefore” is used without a clear logical link. The opening also repeats the chart’s subject rather than guiding the reader through the main features. Separate the overview from the comparisons, group related categories together, and use clear references to the years and figures so the reader can follow each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “restaurants,” and frequency expressions such as “once in week” and “a few times in years.” This shows an attempt to describe the chart, but the range is basic and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “majoratic of people,” “hiting,” and “not loving” are unclear or unsuitable for describing statistical patterns; “line graph” is also inaccurate because the visual is a bar chart. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe a figure as “accounted for” a percentage, or say that a category “was the most common,” rather than using vague expressions such as “higher number.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences and use time references, but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes obscuring the intended meaning. Examples include “There are lines which is showing,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “In 2006 hiting almost 35% of people,” which is not a complete sentence. The phrase “2003 public are almost 30% ating” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Tense, articles, and sentence boundaries need more consistent control. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “In 2006, about one-third of people ate at fast-food restaurants once a week,” and use punctuation to separate comparisons.

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