Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This bar chart demonstrates the how repitition of individuals in the USA ate in fast food restaurants in 2003 to 2013.

Overall, the proportion of the junk food in once a week and once or a twice a month was highest point, while the parcentage of street food in every day and never was lowest point.

It is clear that the percentage of people were in every day a tiny fraction in 2003, 2006 and 2013. Furthermore, the ratio of individuals were 17% in 2003 in several times a week, while it increased and reached 20% in 2006, then it decreased again and come to 16% in 2013. By contrast, the rate of people in junk food was a tiny fraction in never over a decade.

It is evident that the fraction of citizen in street food was 31% in 2013 in once a week, then slighty more rise and reach 34% in 2006, but it was major declined and come to 27% in 2013. Moreover, the rate of people in local food was 30% in 2003 in once or twice a month, and was inclined and come 25% in 2006, but it again grew and reach maximum point 34% in once or twice a month.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, noting that weekly and monthly eating were common while daily eating and never eating were less common. However, the overview is imprecise, and several key figures or trends are misreported: for example, once a week is given as 31% in 2013 and 34% in 2006, whereas the chart shows 28% and 33%; the monthly category reaches 33% in 2013, not 34%. The description of daily and never eating as a “tiny fraction” is also vague, and the 2003–2013 pattern for never eating is not clearly reported. To improve, select the main comparisons accurately and give a clear overview supported by correctly matched years and figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, overview and two detail paragraphs, and it uses linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “By contrast” and “Moreover.” This gives the reader some sense of how the information is being grouped. However, progression is weakened by unclear or contradictory sequencing: “31% in 2013” is followed by “then slighty more rise and reach 34% in 2006,” which reverses the chronological order. Some references, such as “the rate of people in junk food,” do not make clear which chart category is being discussed. Organise the details consistently by category or year, and use precise references to the six frequency groups so the comparisons are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a range of terms for describing proportions, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “fraction” and “rate,” and uses comparison language such as “increased,” “decreased” and “maximum point.” However, vocabulary is often repetitive or inaccurately chosen: “junk food,” “street food” and “local food” do not describe the chart’s frequency categories, and “repetition of individuals” is not a natural way to express how often people ate fast food. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “repitition,” “parcentage” and “slighty.” Use the chart’s category labels directly and choose standard trend language, such as “the proportion who ate out once a week” or “rose to.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast and time clauses, for example, “while it increased and reached 20% in 2006, then it decreased again.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, verb forms and agreement. Examples include “the proportion … was highest point,” “the percentage of people were,” and “it again grew and reach maximum point.” The opening also has an unnecessary article in “demonstrates the how.” These errors sometimes make relationships between the figures difficult to interpret. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and sentence patterns such as “The figure rose from 17% to 20%, before falling to 16%,” while checking subject–verb agreement and articles.

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