Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in 2003 a few people ate fast food in USA on daily basis. But later on people gradually increase to ate fast food in a week. yes off course some people would like to ate fast food when they go to resturant . but in 2006 the percentage of people in USA up to the mark. majority likes to go resturant and place their different orders. people know that jung food may demage their heath because fast food has no protein. but people also like to join resturant and ate fast food.if i discuss recently situation in USAalot of people ate fast food because some are jobholders they have no time to cook just like womens. but in rare caes , some prople avoid to ate fast food becuase they sre health conciosmess. so overall i mentio the per entage of usa people majority likes to ate fast food within a month and a few people who do not like to ate fast food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises that the chart concerns how often people in the USA ate fast food, and its closing sentence attempts to identify monthly eating as common. However, it does not accurately report the chart’s main comparisons or give a clear, data-based overview. For example, it says that people “gradually increase to ate fast food in a week,” whereas weekly eating rose from 31% in 2003 to 33% in 2006 before falling to 28% in 2013. It also claims that “a few people” ate fast food daily without comparing the three years, and the comments about jobs, cooking, protein and health are not shown by the chart. Focus on the largest categories and their changes, using the figures to support each point.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to move through time, with references to 2003, 2006 and the “recently” situation, and the final “so overall” signals a conclusion. However, the response does not develop a clear sequence of chart observations: it shifts from frequency to restaurant orders, health, employment and cooking, which interrupts progression. The repeated use of “but” and “because” does not clearly connect relevant comparisons, and there are no paragraphs to distinguish an overview from supporting details. Organise the response into a short introduction and overview, followed by a paragraph comparing the main categories across the years. Use linking phrases to show actual changes, such as “by contrast” or “while,” rather than adding unrelated explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary connected with the topic, including “percentage,” “daily basis,” “majority” and “within a month,” so the general subject can be understood. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or informal for describing a chart. “Up to the mark” does not communicate a specific trend, while “jung food” and “health conciosmess” contain spelling errors that make the intended meaning less clear. Repeated phrases such as “ate fast food” also limit precision. Build a small set of accurate terms for frequency and change, such as “once a week,” “accounted for,” “increased” and “declined,” and use the chart’s category labels rather than vague descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, including “if i discuss recently situation in USA…” and a sentence beginning “but in rare caes,” but control is inconsistent. Verb forms are often incorrect: “people gradually increase to ate” and “would like to ate” should use appropriate tense and infinitive forms. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “majority likes to go resturant,” while several sentences run together without reliable punctuation. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “The weekly figure rose in 2006, whereas monthly visits peaked in 2013.” Check tense consistency and subject–verb agreement when editing.

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