Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Introduction:

The given chart explores the percentage of USA people who joined resturants for food. Different people likes fast food in different time periods.

body paragraph:

This current studies explores the compare and contrasts between USA people who like to join resturants for jung foods. in 2003 servel people visit to resturants to enjoy theirselves with their love ones. Then in 2006 a few people would like to join resutant in USA twice a week ,they do that just for relaxtaion as well as for enjoyment. different people have different hectic routines. Might pe possible a few people like fast food just because of work load they can not cooked by theirselves. at the end, in 2013 a minorty of people likes jung food ,they are very concious about their health snd diet.

conclusion:

in the final thought, USA people join resturant on their personal interests. Not eveyone likes but a few people are intesrested to enjoy the jung food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response recognises the broad topic—fast-food eating in the USA—but does not adequately summarise the chart. It gives no accurate figures and does not identify the main pattern: weekly eating was the most common frequency in 2003 and 2006, while monthly eating became the most common in 2013. The claim that “a few people” ate fast food in 2013 is misleading, since 28% ate weekly and 33% monthly. Much of the response instead speculates about relaxation, workload and health, none of which is shown by the data. To improve, report the key categories and comparisons objectively, including the shift from weekly to monthly visits and the consistently small proportions who ate daily or never did so.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has recognisable sections labelled introduction, body paragraph and conclusion, and it uses time markers such as “Then in 2006” and “at the end, in 2013.” These provide a basic framework. However, the ideas do not progress as a chart summary: the body moves from unsupported explanations about relaxation and workload to health and diet, rather than comparing the data in a clear order. The conclusion repeats a general opinion instead of drawing together the chart’s main trends. Some transitions are awkward, and the long body paragraph combines several unrelated points. Organise the response around the years or the most important frequency categories, and use comparisons to connect each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The writer attempts vocabulary related to the topic, including “percentage,” “time periods,” “minority” and “health and diet,” and uses some linking expressions. However, word choice is often inaccurate or unsuitable for an academic chart report: “joined restaurants,” “jung foods” and “enjoy theirselves” make the meaning unclear or unnatural. There are also frequent spelling errors, including “resturants,” “relaxation” (written as “relaxtaion”) and “conscious” (written as “concious”). Repetition of “people” and “like” limits precision. Build a small set of accurate reporting phrases, such as “the proportion who ate out,” “accounted for” and “rose/fell,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use time clauses, for example, “Then in 2006 a few people would like to join…” and “Might pe possible a few people like fast food just because of work load…”. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, and errors in agreement, tense, articles and punctuation make the report difficult to follow. Examples include “Different people likes,” “a minorty of people likes,” and the fragment “Might pe possible a few people…”. Capitalisation is also inconsistent after full stops. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses: for example, “In 2006, 33% ate fast food once a week, the highest figure that year.”

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