Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the topic is about to frequency of eating at fast food restraunts among people in the USA (2003 and 2013)

The fast food like pizza's, burger's and a lot of thaings that are not healty for us is very dangerous for us because its affect on our health and life. Because life is very important to live.

So the first chart showing the percentage of people that dont like to eat fast food daily because of course the fast food is unhealthy and non digestive its affect on our stomach that we cant afford anymore.

The 2nd chart of percentage (20%) shows that they eat fast food in several times in a week to change the taste as daily they ate.Then chart of percentage (30% to 35%) shows that people of USA eat fast food in Once a week and Once or twice a month which is good but not best.And the chart of percentage (5 to 15%) shows that they eat fast food in few times a year and its totaly best but the majority of these people is less.last the chart of percentage shows that they never eat fast food less than 6%.

so these all about the frequency of people who lives in USA eat fast food mostly in once a week and once or twice a month which is not effective.they should avoid to eat fast food as compare to healthy food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the general subject and mentions several frequency categories, but it does not adequately summarise the chart’s main features. The opening refers to 2003 and 2013 but overlooks 2006, and the figures are often vague or inaccurate: for example, “20%” is given for several times a week without identifying the year, while the chart shows 17%, 20% and 16% across the three years. The claim that people “dont like to eat fast food daily” is not supported by the data, which reports frequency rather than reasons or preferences. Much of the response shifts to health advice and opinions about fast food, which are outside the task. Focus on an accurate overview and compare the main changes across all three years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to category-by-category comments and a concluding statement, and phrases such as “So,” “Then,” and “last” signal some progression. However, the response is not organised into clear paragraphs, and the chart description is repeatedly interrupted by unrelated comments about health, such as “they should avoid to eat fast food.” Connections between ideas are sometimes unclear: “The 2nd chart” does not specify which category or year is meant, and “which is good but not best” does not explain the comparison. Group the information into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using clear references to categories and years rather than ordinal labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “frequency,” “daily,” and “once or twice a month,” so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unsuitable for describing a chart. Phrases such as “the 2nd chart” and “the chart of percentage” do not clearly identify the data, while “not effective” and “totaly best” express unsupported judgements rather than trends. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “restraunts,” “thaings,” “healty,” and “totaly.” Build a more precise set of reporting verbs and trend phrases, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “because” and “which,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement appear in examples such as “its affect on our health,” “people who lives in USA,” and “they eat fast food in few times a year.” Articles and prepositions are also frequently missing or incorrectly used, as in “in Once a week” and “in several times in a week.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention: the opening health discussion contains run-on sentences, and spacing around full stops is inconsistent. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them with controlled clauses to describe changes across years.

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