Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart shows the frequency on how

people eating at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. It seems that the people in USA must ate in fast food restaurant.

In the year 2003 was the highest percentage of 30% that people were ate once a week in a fast food restaurant followed by once or twice a month and later on that year is not more eating in the fast food restaurant and its become 4% of wants to eat in fast food restaurant.

The year 2006 and 2013 are the same total of 3% was people in USA are much more likely go and eat in everyday. While that same year has alao equal again the percentage of people must eat in once a week or twice a month that give for 33% and it mostly close for the half of people were ate in a fast food restaurant.

Overall the people in USA must preffered to eat once or twice a month in a fast food restaurant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and give a relevant overall statement that eating once or twice a month was preferred, which is supported by the 2013 figure. However, the report only partially selects and accurately describes the main features. The claim that 30% was the highest figure in 2003 is incorrect: once a week was highest at about 31%, with monthly eating close behind at 30%. The 2006 and 2013 figures are also confused: 33% for once a week occurred in 2006, while 33% for once or twice a month occurred in 2013. Several categories and changes are omitted, and the opening claim that people “must ate” does not communicate a clear chart finding. Compare the three years more precisely and include a clear overview of the main shifts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response has an introduction, paragraphs referring to different years, and a concluding overview. This gives the reader a basic sense of the topic and the intended comparison. However, progression is difficult to follow because the year-by-year information is mixed together and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, “followed by once or twice a month and later on that year” does not clearly show which category or year is being discussed. The repeated use of “that year” and “same year” also makes references uncertain, while “While” does not establish a clear contrast in its sentence. Group the figures by meaningful trends, use explicit year and category references, and connect comparisons with accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “once a week,” and “once or twice a month,” so the reader can recognise the subject and some categories. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or combinations make the intended meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “frequency on how people eating,” “must preffered,” and “much more likely go and eat in everyday” are not natural ways to describe chart data. Spelling errors such as “preffered” and “alao” further reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for reporting figures and trends, using expressions such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” “declined to,” and “the largest proportion,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use time references, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure the comparisons. Examples include “people eating” instead of a correctly formed clause, “In the year 2003 was the highest percentage,” and “the people in USA must ate.” Verb forms, sentence structure, articles, and agreement are often inaccurate. The sentence beginning “The year 2006 and 2013 are the same total” also combines several ideas without a clear grammatical structure, making the figures hard to follow. Use straightforward subject–verb sentences first—for example, “In 2003, 31% ate fast food once a week”—then add carefully controlled comparisons. Check tense, articles, and clause boundaries in each sentence.

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