Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram illustrate the frequently people in USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

In vertical side the percentage of people and horizontal side is the day week month and year.

The highest %is 33 % and the lowest % is almost the 3 %.Once a week the % of 2003 is almost 31% and 2006 is 33% and 2013 is likely 28 %. In a few times a year the all % is 2003 is 13% and 2006 is 15% and 2013 is 15 %. And other is every day the % of 2003 is 4% and 2006 is 3% and same is 2013.In the other way never is certainly 2003 5% 2006 is 4% and 2013 is the same as 2006.

In a few year the % of 2003 is 13% and 2006 is 15%and 2013 is same as 2006. So, the all % is difference in every day year week and month.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant categories and report some figures accurately, including the weekly figures (31%, 33% and 28%) and the yearly figures (about 13%, 15% and 15%). However, the response only minimally summarises the chart: it has no clear overview of the main pattern, and it omits the important once-or-twice-a-month category, which rose to 33% in 2013. The opening description of the axes is also inaccurate: the horizontal axis lists eating frequencies, not “the day week month and year.” Some figures are rounded acceptably, though “never” in 2003 is closer to 4.5% than 5%. The response is 148 words, below the 150-word minimum; the 10 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Add a concise overview and compare the main categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move through different frequency categories, and phrases such as “In the other way” and “So” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the information is not arranged into a clear report: there are no distinct overview and detail sections, and the sequence jumps between categories before repeating the yearly figures near the end. The final sentence, “the all % is difference in every day year week and month,” does not clearly summarise a comparison. Repeated use of “And” and “In a few…” also makes the progression difficult to follow. Group the data into paragraphs, present the overall pattern first, and then compare related frequencies in a logical order.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses basic vocabulary relevant to the chart, including “highest,” “lowest,” “percentage,” and frequency labels such as “every day” and “once a week.” This allows the reader to recognise the topic and some comparisons. However, the range is repetitive and several word choices or phrases are unclear, such as “the frequently people,” “the all %,” and “In a few year.” “Diagram” is also less precise than “bar chart,” while “day week month and year” does not accurately name the horizontal categories. Use the chart’s labels consistently and choose standard reporting language, for example, “the proportion of people” and “the figure for.” This would make the comparisons more precise and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt several simple statements and some longer sentences that include comparisons, such as the sentence listing the weekly figures for all three years. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The diagram illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the % of 2003 is almost 31%” uses an unclear sentence pattern. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistently controlled, as in “In a few times a year the all % is 2003 is 13%.” Most sentences rely on basic structures, with little accurate variety. Practise patterns such as “The proportion who ate there weekly was…” and use full stops to separate comparisons; check agreement and article use when editing.

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