Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

overall the chart shows that the people in USA who eat the fast food inbetween 2003 to 2013 . this chart gives us a information about the percentage of people in ten year .

all in all , we can noticed that the people who eat fast food everyday those frequency is very low and there percentage will maximum 4% . On the other hand the people that eat several time eat out those frequency is little bit high than those who eat every day . moreover the indiviuals that eat once or twice a week those frequency is too be same . futhermore , the percentage of indiviuals that eat a few times a year is less than once a month or once a year and gradually less than several times a week . now those people is left those eat never fast food those percentage is very low

in conclusion , the indiviuals of eating fast food is gradually increased from 2003 to 2013 . in ten year year the living style and eating style is totally change .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and mentions several frequency groups, but it reports very few accurate comparisons or changes across the three years. The claim that daily eating reaches a maximum of 4% is broadly supported, yet the statement that people eating fast food “once or twice a week” were similar is unclear and does not match the chart’s categories: it shows “once a week” and “once or twice a month.” The conclusion that fast-food eating “gradually increased” is not supported, since the weekly category falls by 2013 while monthly eating rises. A clearer overview should identify the main shift from weekly eating being most common in 2003 and 2006 to monthly eating in 2013, then support it with selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: an opening, a central paragraph discussing frequency groups, and a concluding statement. Connectors such as “On the other hand,” “moreover,” and “in conclusion” show an attempt to link ideas. However, the response does not progress clearly through the years or organise comparisons in a consistent way; it moves between categories without explaining how their figures change. Several linking expressions are repetitive or do not express the intended relationship, and references such as “those frequency” and “those people” make it difficult to identify the group being discussed. Group the data into clear comparisons—for example, the most common frequencies and the least common ones—and use precise references to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small range of relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “frequency,” “gradually,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations strain clarity, such as “eat the fast food,” “eat out,” and “those frequency.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “inbetween,” “indiviuals,” and “futhermore.” Use standard chart language and vary it carefully: “the proportion of people,” “ate at fast-food restaurants,” “accounted for,” and “rose/fell” are more precise. Check spelling and avoid using “gradually” unless the figures show a steady change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts connected sentences and some longer structures, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “we can noticed,” “there percentage will maximum 4%,” and “those people is left,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “people in USA” and “inbetween 2003 to 2013.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, with lower-case openings and spaces before commas. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add comparisons using controlled clauses—for example, “The daily figure was 4% in 2003 and fell to 3% in 2006.”

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