Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart is shows frequently people in the usa ate in fast food resturants between 2003 to 2013.

overall,x-axis indicated years and y-axis indicated percentage of the people,the largest number of people to eat junk food are constant moreover even 32 %of people eat junk food on 2006 .Both are included same percent once a week and twice a month,2 to 4% of people daily ate junk food in every day on 2003,some people never ate junkfood on 2013,heighest percent of people to ate junk food is 2006 and 2013 as far as i concerned both are constant.on 2003 heighest humber of people to ate junk food is 32% it is the heighest number of people to ate junk food in a year futhermore on 2013 people should control to ate junk food

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and mention several relevant categories, including daily eating and the weekly/monthly frequencies. However, the main features are not reported accurately or clearly: the highest weekly figure was about 33% in 2006, while the highest monthly figure was about 33% in 2013, not a shared or constant peak. The claim that 2003 had a highest figure of 32% is also inaccurate; its largest categories were about 31% once a week and 30% once or twice a month. The response is 124 words, below the 150-word minimum, and the overview includes advice to control junk-food consumption rather than summarising the chart. Select the key trends and compare them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to begin with an introduction and an overview, and the response refers to several chart categories. However, the ideas are crowded into one long paragraph, with no clear progression from an overview to supporting comparisons. Linking words such as “moreover,” “furthermore,” and “as far as I concerned” do not make the relationships between points clear, and some statements contradict or repeat one another—for example, the claims that the highest figures were “constant” and that 2003 had the highest number. Organise the response into short paragraphs and group comparisons by frequency or year. Use connectors only where they accurately show a contrast, similarity, or change.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “daily,” “once a week,” and “twice a month,” so the reader can recognise the topic and some categories. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or informal for an academic chart summary. Repeated use of “junk food” is less precise than the chart’s wording, “fast food restaurants,” and “heighest humber” contains spelling errors that reduce clarity. Phrases such as “people to ate” and “people should control to ate” are also unnatural collocations. Build a small set of accurate reporting expressions, such as “accounted for,” “the proportion of people,” and “rose/fell to,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine information using longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence boundaries are often unclear. For example, “The chart is shows” has an incorrect verb construction, while “the largest number of people to eat junk food are constant” has problems with agreement and sentence structure. In “2 to 4% of people daily ate junk food in every day on 2003,” the word order, preposition, and tense pattern make the meaning difficult to follow. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly in the long overview sentence. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add clauses with “while” or “whereas”; use past-tense reporting consistently and separate each main point with a full stop.

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