Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates that pepole in usa ate fast food restaurants between 2003 to 2013.given below the time period and number of pepole

Overall, The number of pepole ate fast food in Once a week or Once or twicea month are inhances sa compared to other time period . In sciences

2006 show the bar pepole ate ate most fast food.

Time period most lager ate fast food 2006 Onces a week percent goes to above 32% but the other time period perod are significantly dicline.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that weekly and monthly visits were prominent and that weekly eating peaked in 2006. However, the response reports very few accurate details and does not summarise the main patterns across all three years. For example, it says the 2006 weekly figure was “above 32%,” which is broadly consistent with the chart, but the claim that the other periods “significantly dicline” is unclear and does not describe the actual changes. The chart also shows monthly visits rising to 33% in 2013, an important feature you omit. The response is only 88 words, below the required 150, so the task is addressed minimally. Include a clear overview and several accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to separate an introduction from an overview and further detail, and phrases such as “Overall” and “but” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the information is not arranged in a clear progression: the final paragraph repeats the point about 2006 without developing a comparison, and the fragment “In sciences” interrupts the meaning. The opening also contains an unfinished phrase, “given below the time period and number of people,” rather than a clear introduction. Paragraphing alone does not make the report coherent when relationships between the points are difficult to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and paragraphs comparing the years, using clear links such as “by contrast” and “by 2013”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “bar chart,” “time period,” “percent,” and “ate fast food,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-form errors make parts difficult to understand: “pepole,” “inhances,” “dicline,” and “lager” appear in key statements. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “the number of people ate fast food” and “most lager ate fast food.” Use precise chart language, for example, “the proportion of people who ate at fast-food restaurants,” “increased,” “declined,” and “the highest figure.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “people” and “time period” when more specific wording is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple statements and an overview, but sentence structures are very limited and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. For example, “The number of people ate fast food in Once a week” lacks a grammatical link between the subject and the action; “2006 show the bar people ate ate most fast food” has problems with tense, sentence structure, and repetition; and “the other time period … are significantly” has faulty agreement and an incomplete construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the full stop after “2013” and the isolated “.” later. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The proportion eating weekly was highest in 2006,” and use past-tense forms consistently when describing the chart.

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