Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate frequently individuals eating fast food hotels in the Usa from 2003 and 2013.

Overall,the citizen decline in 2003 and throughly boost in once a weeek.And then again dropped in first year.Therefore, public in 2006 first reduced.And then once a week increased.And then again never dropped.So, in 2013 people decreased in everyday and significantly boost in once or twice a month.And then reduced in never.

First of all, in 2003 people eating food everyday 4% and in once a week 31%.So, In twice a month individuals eating 30%.So, this figure dropped.However, in 2006 citizen eating food in daily 3% and in week 34%.And in once or twice a month eating 25%.So,this figure reduced.

Secondly, in 2013 public eating food daily routine 3% and several times 16%.In few times a year eating fast food 15%.Therefore, this figure throughly decreased.

To sum up, peoples in 2003 eating fast food everyday normal.So,in 2006 public significantly declined.However, in 2013 citizen remain stable in 2006.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and refer to all three years, with some relevant figures such as 4% eating fast food daily in 2003 and 33% eating once a week in 2006 (you report this as 34%). However, the overview is unclear and includes unsupported or contradictory trends, such as saying people “decline” and then “boost” without specifying the category. Several key comparisons are missing: once or twice a month rose to 33% in 2013, while once a week fell from its 2006 peak to 28%. The final claim that 2013 remained stable compared with 2006 is misleading. Select the main patterns accurately and summarise them clearly before giving supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, a separate overview, two detail paragraphs and a concluding sentence, so there is an attempt to organise the information. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview jumps between categories and years, and the conclusion repeats or contradicts earlier points. Linking phrases such as “And then again” and “So” are used repeatedly without making the relationships between figures clear. The detail paragraphs also do not compare the same categories consistently across years. Grouping the data by the most important trends—for example, weekly dining versus monthly dining—and using clear comparisons would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “people,” “eating,” “figure,” and “dropped.” Some word choices make the meaning difficult to interpret: “fast food hotels” is not an appropriate description of restaurants, and “throughly boost” does not clearly express a chart trend. There are also spelling and form errors, including “weeek” and “everyday” where the frequency category should be expressed as “every day.” Use precise chart language and avoid forcing synonyms that do not fit. For example, describe a percentage as “rose,” “fell,” or “remained stable,” and name the frequency category directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple patterns, and frequent errors in sentence formation and punctuation sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “in 2003 people eating food everyday 4%” lacks a correctly formed verb and clear sentence structure. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent in phrases such as “the citizen decline” and “public … remain stable.” Commas are often missing after introductory phrases, and spaces after full stops are inconsistent. Practise accurate reporting structures such as “In 2003, 4% of people ate fast food every day” and “The proportion eating once a week fell to 28% in 2013.”

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