Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the incresing rate of junck food restutsnts and majority people in America develop instrest during 2003 to 2013 and make a comperison between them.

Overall,growing rate of eat out junker food in people going up day by day in 2013 once or twice a month is equal to once a week since 2006 and get many down falls and some where going up.

Ferthermore people use fast food on daily basies in both years aproximately less then 5%. In a several times a week in 2003 going near to 17% and in a 2013 maybe 16%. Once a week ueses pf people up to 30% in 2003 and below to 30% in 2013.

If we talk about once or twice a month 30% in 2003 and the ratio of people going up very fastly in 2013 its near to 35%. A few times a year rate come down maybe 14% and in a 2013 15%. the percentage of people they never use junck food from resturants in there life is 5% in 2003 and 4% in 2013 and its also equal to 2006 as well. Somewhere report represent that mostly people didnt like fast food most in their life on daily bacis.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant categories and include some figures, such as daily eating being below 5% and monthly eating rising to about 35% in 2013. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: weekly eating was the most common frequency in 2003 and 2006, while monthly eating became the most common in 2013. The claim that the overall rate of eating out was “going up day by day” is not supported by the chart, and the statement that monthly and weekly figures were equal “since 2006” is inaccurate. Some comparisons are also incomplete or imprecise, including the figures for “a few times a year” and “never.” Focus on the largest categories and describe their changes accurately in a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details, and it uses a few linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “If we talk about.” However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines several unclear claims, and the final sentence introduces an unsupported generalisation rather than concluding the data description. Connections between figures are often weak: for example, the discussion shifts from weekly to monthly eating without clearly comparing the years. Some transitions are mechanical or awkward, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Organise the report around the main trends—frequent eating, monthly eating, and the less common categories—and use clear comparisons to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the chart, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “approximately,” and “comparison,” but control is limited and spelling errors are frequent. Forms such as “incresing,” “junck,” “restutsnts,” and “comperison” make parts of the report harder to understand. Several expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “growing rate of eat out junker food,” “going up very fastly,” and “use fast food on daily basis.” The chart concerns how often people ate at fast-food restaurants, so use that wording rather than suggesting it measures interest or whether people liked the food. Build a small set of accurate phrases for describing proportions, increases, decreases, and frequency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and comparisons, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “Overall,growing rate of eat out junker food in people going up day by day” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “Once a week ueses pf people up to 30%” is incomplete. Verb forms and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the ratio … going up” and “people they never use.” Articles and prepositions are often missing or incorrectly used, and punctuation is not reliably controlled. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then add comparisons using accurate patterns such as “the proportion who ate … was” and “rose from … to ….”

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