Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph compares the data of percentage of people eating fast food in the restaurants between the years 2003 and 2013. Overall, the graph shows a fluctuated pattern, moreover, less number of people used to eat everyday or never went out to eat, whereas, eating out was famous once a week and once or twice a month.

Less than 5% people ate outside in the three years, for instance, 2003, 2006 and 2013. Percentage of people who ate several times a week were 15 to 20% in 2003, 20% in 2006, however, a slighly above than 15% in 2013. People who used to eat once a week showed percentage slighly above than 30% in 2003, between 30 and 35% in 2006 and between 25 and 35% in 2013.

People who preferred eating in a hotel once or twice a month were 30% in 2003, 25% in 2006, however, above 30% in 2013. People who ate out a few times a year were between 10 and 15% in 2003, whereas, 15% in 2006 and 2013 each. People who never ate outside were less than 5% in all three years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all six frequency categories and make relevant comparisons across the three years. The overview identifies the low proportions who ate every day or never, and the popularity of weekly or monthly visits. Several figures are broadly accurate, such as monthly eating rising to above 30% in 2013 and yearly visits reaching 15% in 2006 and 2013. However, some reporting is imprecise: the once-a-week figure in 2013 is given as “between 25 and 35%” rather than about 28%, and the several-times-a-week figure for 2003 is described as 15–20% rather than about 17%. The overview also calls the pattern “fluctuated” without clearly summarising the main shifts. Select the key peaks and changes more precisely to make the report clearer and better developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs reporting the categories and their figures. This makes the information generally easy to follow. However, the body reads largely as a sequence of category-by-category statements, with repeated openings such as “People who…” and “Percentage of people…”. Linking words including “however” and “whereas” sometimes connect details mechanically or awkwardly, and the overview’s “moreover” does not express a clear relationship between its ideas. Grouping the main changes—for example, contrasting weekly visits with monthly visits—would create stronger progression. Use cohesive devices selectively and make comparisons within sentences where the data are directly related.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the chart, including “percentage,” “once a week,” and “a few times a year,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at varied phrasing, such as “preferred eating” and “used to eat.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a formal chart report: “the data of percentage,” “eating out was famous,” and “eating in a hotel” do not express the intended ideas precisely. “Fluctuated pattern” is also not a clear description of the overall trends. Spelling errors such as “slighly” further reduce accuracy. Prefer standard collocations for describing proportions and frequency, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, using clauses with “whereas” and “however” to compare years. Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “Less than 5% people” needs an article or a different construction (“Less than 5% of people”), while “Percentage of people who ate several times a week were” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Overall” also joins ideas with punctuation and linking that do not form a controlled structure. Work on articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, and build comparisons in complete, well-punctuated sentences. Greater control of these patterns would make your range more effective.

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