Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The givem bar chart elucidates information about Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA ([redacted phone]) . The chart compares the data in number or people . It is clear that there noticeable differences among the categories shown in the chart . According to the chart in 2006 everyday eating fast food percentage is 4 . In 2006 eating fast food everyday percentage is 3 and 2013 everyday eating fast food percentage is 3 . In 2003 several times a week eating fast food is 17% peoples and 2006 several times a week in eating fast food is 20% peoples and 2013 several times a week eating fast food is 16 % peoples . In 2003 once a week eating fast food peoples percentage is 31 and once a week people eating fast food percentage is 35 and 2013 peoples eating fast food percentage is 28 . In 2003 a few times a year peoples eating fast food percentage is 14 and 2006 a few times a year peoples eating fast food percentage is 15 and 2013 people eating fast food percentage is 15 . This chart show the clear comparison among the bar chart .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and reports several relevant figures, including the weekly and several-times-a-week categories. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns, and some figures are inaccurate: daily eating in 2003 is given as 4% but incorrectly introduced as 2006; the 2006 once-a-week figure is stated as 35% rather than about 33%; and the monthly category is omitted. The figures for “a few times a year” are also reported as 14% in 2003, rather than about 12.5%. The final claim of a “clear comparison” does not explain the key changes. Select the most important trends and summarise them accurately before adding supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence, moving through several frequency categories and comparing years, so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph with no clear overview or grouping of related trends. Repeated sentence openings such as “In 2003…” and “In 2006…” make the account mechanical, while the repeated phrase “eating fast food” adds little connection between ideas. Some comparisons are difficult to follow because the year and category are not consistently expressed. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and detail paragraphs grouped by similar patterns; use concise comparisons such as “the weekly figure peaked in 2006 before falling.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart topic and its categories, using phrases such as “several times a week,” “once a week,” and “a few times a year.” However, the range is limited and repetitive, particularly through repeated use of “people,” “percentage,” and “eating fast food.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, as in “the data in number or people” and “the clear comparison among the bar chart.” There is also a spelling error in “givem.” Use standard chart language such as “the proportion of people,” “accounted for,” and “rose/fell,” and vary the wording without changing the meaning of the categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple present-tense statements and attempts longer comparisons, but the sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “In 2003 several times a week eating fast food is 17% peoples” has an awkward word order and an incorrect plural construction; “once a week people eating fast food percentage is 35” has similar problems. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, and spaces appear before punctuation. These errors sometimes make the relationships between years, categories, and figures harder to understand. Practise clear patterns such as “In 2003, 17% of people ate fast food several times a week” and use past-tense verbs consistently when describing the chart’s data.

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