Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart frequently illustrates the numbers of people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between the time period of 2003 and 2013. Overall,the gap years of 2003,2006 and 2013 defining the average percentage of people ate fast food in restaurants. In 2003,there were very few rates of people who ate fast food in restaurant every day.In 2006 and 2013, the rate becomes equal to each other.the rate was then recorded in 2003 when people were went to restaurant for eating fast food the percentage was recorded several times a week 15%. In 2006,there were a enormous high level of people and percentage reached upto 20% but Sudden, decline the rate of people in 2013 and percentage drop to again 15%.there different situations when people went to restaurant once a week or a month and a few times a year and then stop theirselves. the highest rate recorded 2006,which increased upto 30%.There were also a same huge percentage recorded in 2013.After some time,people were not visit to restaurant to ate fast food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and mention several relevant categories, including daily visits and eating several times a week. However, the overview is unclear: “the gap years … defining the average percentage” does not summarise the main pattern. Several figures are inaccurate or attached to the wrong category. For example, 15% in 2003 refers to neither the stated several-times-a-week figure (about 17%) nor the chart’s exact value; the 2006 peak of about 33% is for once a week, not 30%, and the 2013 figure of about 33% is for once or twice a month. The response also omits the key shift between the once-a-week and monthly categories. Select the main comparisons accurately and give a clear overview of the highest and changing frequencies.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to move through the years, and phrases such as “In 2003” and “In 2006” provide some basic signposting. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear comparison: the response jumps between daily visits, weekly visits, monthly visits and people who stopped going, without consistently identifying which figures belong to which category. The overview sentence does not establish a useful organising point, and the final sentence introduces an incomplete idea rather than concluding the summary. Use a clear overview followed by paragraphs that group the main categories or compare the years, and use references such as “this figure” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “rate,” “increased” and “decline,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow, such as “the gap years,” “a enormous high level,” and “stop theirselves.” Repetition of “rate,” “people” and “restaurant” also limits precision. Choose standard language for describing data and distinguish clearly between a proportion and a frequency. More accurate phrases such as “the proportion of people,” “reached a peak,” and “fell to” would make comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, particularly in the longer constructions. Examples include “the numbers of people … ate fast food,” “the rate becomes equal,” and “people were went to restaurant,” where verb forms and sentence structure are faulty. Articles and agreement are also problematic in “a enormous high level,” while punctuation and spacing around commas are often inaccurate. These errors sometimes make the intended comparison hard to understand. Build shorter, complete sentences first, using reliable patterns such as “The proportion who ate there daily was…” and “This figure fell in 2013.” Then practise combining comparisons with accurate past-tense verbs and punctuation.

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