Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

So now I describe the whole summary that is in a number of countries some, people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on construction new railway lines for very fast trins between cities. It is best because when we travel any places our first thing is how we are fastly visit that place but that is not possible because transport is very delaye like most people face traffic but if the train are made our very easy because we are visit our place very soon but some also disadvantage because this mathod are very costly. On the other hand other people believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport it's also best like metro rail because this one of most special public transport system this thing people travel their place very early like 10 or 15 minutes it is also best thing and people also like this on of the main reason is its good quality

However in this way I discuss this whole side wich is best and good or bad because we know the all thing are some advantages and disadvantages also.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You refer to both proposed approaches: building very fast intercity railways and improving existing transport, and you give brief reasons such as faster journeys, traffic delays and the cost of new lines. However, the discussion is very limited, and your own opinion is not clearly stated; the closing sentence only says that both options have advantages and disadvantages. The response also contains 162 words, so it is 88 words below the required minimum; 29 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. This leaves little space to explain or support your points. To strengthen the response, state which investment you favour, develop each side with specific reasoning or an example, and finish with a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with a contrast introduced by “On the other hand” and a final sentence beginning “However.” These signals show that you recognise the need to compare the two views. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear, developed paragraphs, and the opening repeats much of the question rather than introducing your position. Several points run together in long sentences, making the progression difficult to follow; for example, the discussion of traffic, train construction and cost is packed into one sentence. The final sentence does not clearly conclude the argument. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and connect each main point to an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “large sums of money,” “public transport,” “traffic” and “costly,” so the reader can identify the main subject. There are also attempts to express comparison and evaluation, such as “On the other hand” and “good quality.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or repeated, including “this one of most special public transport system” and repeated uses of “best” and “thing.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “trins,” “mathod” and “fastly” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of transport and investment terms, and check spelling and collocations so your ideas are expressed more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and connectors, for example, “because when we travel…” and “On the other hand…,” rather than relying only on isolated short statements. However, sentence structures are often difficult to control, and errors in agreement, articles and verb forms frequently make the meaning unclear. Examples include “if the train are made,” “this one of most special public transport system,” and “people travel their place very early.” Punctuation is also limited, with several ideas joined into long sentences without clear boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles and complete verb patterns when editing.

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