Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Improving infrastructure of cities is important for development of a country. Some people argue that, it is necessary to spend money on railway and to build fast train track while other believes, it should be spent on improving structure of old vehicles. I give my opnion, after discussing both views.

On the one hand, railway plays a crucial role in modern transportation and a large number of population depend on railway for transportation of laggages and cargoes. It is vital role of the state, to improve necessary maintainess to railway because many people lives are important and to avoid any accident. For example, in pakistan too many problem of railway tracks causes sever damges of life.

On the other hand, maintainess of old vehicles are also government responsibility but it would be done on maderate level because their impotance is also necessary but it would be maintained by transportation agrncies. And also necessary to avaid noice or air pollution that cause severe damage to ecosystem and wildlife animals. For instance, if a state apply legislations or tax on old vehivles so it would be improved.

In my opinion, both of the views are equally important for the betterment of a country as well as for improving infrastructure of a country.

To conclude, the goverment should be responsiable to maintain the infrastructue and environmental hizards caused by burning and also spend money to improve the desired situation anually.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both sides and give a personal view, but the discussion only partially answers the specific question. The prompt contrasts building new high-speed railway lines between cities with improving existing public transport; instead, much of your response discusses railway maintenance, old vehicles, and pollution. The example about railway-track accidents is relevant to safety, but it does not explain the case for new fast trains, and the point about taxing old vehicles is not clearly connected to improving public transport. Your opinion that both views are equally important is stated, but not justified. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, explain distinct benefits of high-speed rail and upgrades to current services, then support your preference with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” an opinion, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, the second body paragraph moves from maintaining old vehicles to pollution and then to legislation or tax without explaining how these points support the view about improving existing public transport. The conclusion repeats the general idea of maintenance and environmental hazards rather than drawing the two arguments together. Use clearer topic sentences and explain the relationship between each supporting point and the paragraph’s main claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “infrastructure,” “transportation,” “pollution,” and “ecosystem,” and the reader can generally identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts difficult to understand, such as “maintainess,” “maderate,” “agrncies,” and “hizards.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “large number of population” and “wildlife animals” do not express the ideas naturally. Aim for accurate transport collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “high-speed rail,” “existing public transport network,” and “service reliability” would help you address the actual comparison and make your argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “Some people argue that, it is necessary” has an unnecessary comma, while “other believes” does not agree in number with its subject. In “many people lives are important,” the possessive form and verb agreement are faulty; “many people’s lives matter” would be clearer. The sentence beginning “And also necessary to avoid…” is incomplete, and the final sentence has an unclear structure. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and punctuation before submitting.

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