Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Country's beauty places a huge impact on its success. Spending a handsome amount of money on the construction of new railway lines for very fast trains between cities is a waste of significant amount of money. We should alow a budget according to its need. While public transport is also very essential for transportation. I partially agree with both statements.

Initially, placing look on the construction of railway lines it is not necessary for government to spend huge amount on constructing new railway lines. Railways are essential part of transportation most of the people use it. From my opinion, significant amount is better option than a huge amount. People frequently use their personal cars in order to move to other cities. So, it seems to be a nonsense to specify a large sum of money on trains.

On the other hand, I agree with that believe that the money should be spent on improving the local transportation such as buses. The eye-catching point is that most of the people travel through buses everyday in their cities. For instance, children use it to go to school and adults use it to go to their offices. Hence, public transportation should be improved in order to make people's life easy.

From my perspective, intially, we should know what thing needs our attention and have to be constructed. Understanding the public's need and facilities that had provided to them we should allow a budget according to it. According to me, people should also argue for thair basic needs. Government should allow same amount of money on everything except trains.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic and state a position—“I partially agree with both statements”—then discuss high-speed rail and local buses. The examples of children travelling to school and adults going to work are relevant. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for constructing new fast railway lines is not really explained, and the argument against them relies mainly on the claim that people use personal cars. Your final suggestion to spend the same amount on everything “except trains” is also unclear and does not fully resolve your position. Develop both sides with specific reasons and make your preferred balance of investment explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding paragraph, so the reader can identify its broad structure. However, progression within and between ideas is limited. For example, the first body paragraph moves from railways being essential to people using cars, without clearly connecting these points to the argument about investment. Linking phrases such as “Initially” and “On the other hand” help signal sections, but some transitions feel mechanical, and the conclusion introduces a new proposal rather than clearly summarising the discussion. Build each paragraph around one main claim, explain it, and then connect the example directly to that claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “construction,” “public transportation,” “budget,” and “transportation,” which makes the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. “Country’s beauty places a huge impact on its success” does not fit the transport argument, while “placing look on” and “a nonsense” are unnatural expressions. There are also spelling errors such as “alow,” “intially,” and “thair.” Aim for precise transport-related language and check common word partnerships; this will make your ideas easier to follow and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, including “While public transport is also very essential for transportation” and “Understanding the public’s need … we should allow a budget according to it.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors recur in articles, agreement, sentence formation, and punctuation. For example, “Railways are essential part” needs an article, while “Country’s beauty places a huge impact” has an unclear grammatical structure. The opening “While” clause is also left as a fragment. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check articles and agreement before using longer clauses.

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