Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the recent years, transport is very essential part of our life. some people believe that it is important to invest large amount of money on building a new railway lines for very quickly moving trains in cities. others oppose that money should be invest on maintaining public transport. In my opinion, both points are valid but improving public transport is more important than building a railway lines.

Firstly, improving public transport is very essentail for local residental areas because reduce trafic conjuction. there are plently of trafic accidents we can see on roads daily. it can improve road accidents and smooth transport system. futhermore peaceful environment is also very important for transport. it can maintain only when reduce traffic accidents, improve local roads, and maintain infrastructure of local transport. For example, buses are going on their time and avoid local transport on school time. government should provide davo buses for local people that effects the local people save their money and time. it can reduce traffic when transport system are maintain.

others people oppse that it is necessary to spend large amount of money eon constrcting new railway lines. there are few drawbacks which local people are facing in future. government should spend too much money on constructing railway lines. big reason is that railway projects could required large amount of money. although this project is not benefical for every local people. it can lead high constrction cost . it is also high amount od noice pollution cause when railway line are building.

To cnclude that, local public transport is essentail because of less traffic accidents, peacfull environment and maintain infrastructure. In my opinion, improving public transport is more important rather than building railweay line.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for improving public transport, and you mention both sides of the debate. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for very fast intercity trains is mostly presented as a list of costs and drawbacks, without explaining why people support them or what benefits they could bring. The public-transport argument includes relevant points about traffic and local services, but several claims are unclear or insufficiently explained, such as how buses running on time would reduce accidents. The example about buses and school time is also difficult to interpret. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific, explained example, then connect your conclusion directly to the comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic essay structure, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main position. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and connections between ideas are often unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from traffic accidents to a peaceful environment, infrastructure, and buses at school time without showing how each point supports the argument. Linking words such as “Firstly,” “furthermore,” and “although” are used, but some do not express the relationship accurately. The conclusion repeats the preference rather than drawing together the comparison. Organise each paragraph around one main claim and use clear cause-and-effect links and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “public transport,” “railway lines,” “traffic accidents,” and “infrastructure,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “traffic conjunction” (apparently intended to mean congestion), “peaceful environment,” and “avoid local transport on school time.” There are also repeated forms such as “large amount of money” and “local people,” which reduce precision. Work on accurate transport collocations and check spelling carefully; choosing familiar words accurately is more effective than attempting an unclear phrase. You could also vary repeated terms with precise alternatives such as commuters, services, and investment.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic connectors, but the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several ideas hard to follow. For instance, “because reduce traffic” lacks a subject and a finite verb, while “it can lead high construction cost” has an incomplete verb pattern. Agreement and number are also inconsistent in “transport system are maintain,” and articles and plurals are often missing or incorrect. Sentence boundaries and capitalisation need attention as well, including the lowercase starts after full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “although,” and “which.” Check each sentence for a subject, verb, agreement, and complete meaning.

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