Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In different countries people think that it is necessary to spend large amount of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between the urban areas so on the other hand people believe the money should spent on improving public transport so both options or developments are good but in my opnion fast trains between cities is the best development for public because in this way we get many advantages.

First of all people who think thats spend large amount of money trains in this way the public transport decrease in this way the polution reduce and in this way people use the trains and it help to improve the economy and in this way fast trains help in time managment in this way we go to any institute fastly in this way all type of people use these trains for transport it is budget friendly and it is less expensive every one can afford it so it has many advantages for public it is a great development for example in japan all the people use the trains for traveling and in the japan there are many too fast trains who travels in seconds.

And the people who thinks or believe should spent money on improving public transport if we spent money on improving public transport it is much more expensive than the trains so it has a great affects on the enviorment due to the polution or noise of public transport on the other side it is benficial for going private it helps to go to the instute in the same cities main places but the trains have the main stops so if the improving the public transport have the advantages so on the other hand it have more disvantges as campare to the trains.

In conclusion i say that spending money on railway lines is a great development and it is a one time invesment as campare to the public transports and it is budget friendly to travel in one city or city to city and trains have less polution than the busses and other public transports if we spend money on electric trains so we get more advantages because the electric trains dont have the pollution and the second main feature or option or advantage is it has much more speed in this way we travel in seconds it is very benificial for the public to travel fast and their tickets are budget friendly and it help the students or the poor and the old people so in the trains we have many options that make our life easier so in my opnion we spend money on the construction of railways and the people who think to spend large amount of money on construction of new railways in the cities they are right and it is a great development if we spend on it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for investing in railway lines, and you attempt to discuss both options. The first body paragraph mentions possible benefits of fast trains, including reduced pollution, time savings and affordability; the next acknowledges that improved public transport can help people reach places within a city. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for improving existing transport is not explained convincingly, and the claim that it is more expensive than trains is asserted without support. Several points about railways are repeated rather than developed with specific reasoning or examples. The Japan example is relevant in principle, but “trains who travels in seconds” is unclear and does not substantiate the claims. Develop each side with accurate, distinct reasons and explain how your examples support your position. (12 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise its broad structure. However, ideas do not progress clearly within paragraphs. The repeated phrase “in this way” and the long chain of points in the first body paragraph make the reasoning difficult to follow. Connectors are often used mechanically or inaccurately, as in “so on the other hand,” while the contrast between the two transport options is not clearly organised. The conclusion repeats many earlier claims instead of drawing them together. Give each paragraph a clear central point, arrange supporting explanations in a logical order, and use a smaller range of linking expressions only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “railway lines,” “public transport,” “economy,” “environment” and “electric trains,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and many words or phrases are repeated, particularly “in this way,” “advantages” and “budget friendly.” Several inaccurate choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “going private,” “trains who travels in seconds” and “it has a great affects.” Spelling errors, including “polution,” “benficial” and “disvantges,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more varied set of transport-related expressions and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise phrases such as “reduce traffic emissions” or “provide faster intercity journeys” over repeated general claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and contrasts using longer sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and many extended sentences are faulty or run together, for example the opening sentence and the long sequence beginning “First of all people who think…”. There are frequent problems with verb forms and agreement: “the money should spent,” “it help,” and “the people who thinks.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing or unclear, as in “in japan all the people use the trains.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to interpret. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses and punctuation.

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