Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in most of devolp countries the metro and electric bus is now used as a method of transport and developed countries now speanding more money on metro transport electric buses instead of railways.but i think spending money on railway lines and improving railway transport system is worth it . i will give reason below to prove my point.

the people who belive that improving existing public transport is worth it think that public transport is today world modern transport it will be more benefical to improve this because it can travel in the city and not cause air pollution also becuase most of public transport use electricity as a fuel so people think that it is more convenient way of transport than railway.

people who think that railway is still is very much worth it and spending money on railway is very much benefical for the betterment of econmy and for large travel on a very low cost.i am also the one who agree with these kind of people.

the reason is that most of railway espacially the old one use coal as a fuel which is less costly than fuel and railway also transport goods as well as mailtrey weoponary as well.the reason is that the to improve railway is that older railway engines use coal as a fuel which should be change with solar power.

in conclusion improving railway and railway line would be worth it to ease the transport and faster growth in ecnomy of a country.so it is more benefical for a country to improve ecnomy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear preference for investing in railways, especially in the opening and conclusion, and you attempt to discuss both views. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for improving existing transport is mainly that it is convenient, serves city travel and uses electricity, while the case for rail focuses on low-cost travel and goods transport. These points are not explained with specific examples or enough reasoning to show why one investment is preferable. The claim that older trains use coal and should be changed to solar power is also unclear and not connected convincingly to the choice between new high-speed lines and improving current services. Develop each side more fully and make your opinion directly address that comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an opening, separate discussion of the two positions, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its basic organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited: ideas are often placed beside one another rather than linked through explanation. For example, the paragraph supporting rail moves from coal use to goods and military transport, then repeats the coal point without showing how these details support the argument. Connect each reason to the main claim and use clearer paragraph focus. Linking phrases such as “the reason is” are repeated, and the conclusion largely restates the preference rather than drawing together the comparison. More precise referencing and transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “public transport,” “air pollution,” “railway lines,” “goods” and “economy,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “benefical,” “worth it” and “the reason is.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “devolp,” “speanding,” “econmy” and “espacially,” make the writing less clear and can distract the reader. Some combinations are also unnatural, including “large travel on a very low cost” and “mailtrey weoponary.” Build a more accurate set of transport and investment terms, and check spelling and collocations carefully so your ideas are expressed more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both simple statements and longer clauses, for example, “the people who believe…” and “because most of public transport use electricity…”. However, the range remains limited, and complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms. In “most of public transport use electricity,” the subject and verb do not agree, while “the reason is that the to improve railway” has an incomplete grammatical structure. Several sentences run together, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a clearly formed supporting clause; then check articles, plural forms and subject–verb agreement.

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