Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people think spend large money on constructing new very best railway lines and half of the people asking that money should be spent on public transport and improve the public transport system.

I agree with the opinion upgrade the public transport helpful for citizen,and very big problem for neligincy public transport for city needed to digital public transport,or provide best facilty.

I disagree money to spend large sums of money on build new railway system most of the people regarding that large amount of money should be utitlize on new trains ways,i do not agree with this opinion,why are not spending money in railway system.

Example:Most people are ultimate poors people not afford train tickets and more expensive preffer the public transport,and train station are build some places are not all places.

Ultimate reason not waste large numbers of money on not successable projects main reason,in the past people are travel in trains all are uses buses i mean public transport and not afford train tickets.

My opinion expend money public transport are very worthfull,and are good project upgraded the public transport,it is very helpful for local public maintain the transport system and should be money spend on latest buses, new station,all allover the public transport is best people do not like the travel on trains like the buses public travel easy overall view money should be spent public transport, trains station in long places and bus station is all places people are easy move one place to another.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for improving public transport, especially in “My opinion expend money public transport,” and you mention relevant considerations such as affordability, access to stations, and upgrading buses. However, the discussion of the two views is uneven: the case for high-speed rail is not explained fairly or in detail, and the question of why investment in rail might benefit people is left unclear. Several points are repeated rather than supported with a specific example or explanation. To strengthen the response, explain one benefit of fast inter-city trains, then compare it with a developed reason for improving everyday transport, such as wider access or lower costs, while maintaining your stated position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable overall direction: it introduces the issue, states a preference, gives reasons, and returns to that preference at the end. However, ideas are not arranged into clear, focused paragraphs, and the progression is difficult to follow. For example, “I disagree money to spend large sums of money on build new railway system” is followed by an unclear question about spending on rail, while the later example combines poverty, ticket prices, and station locations without showing how these points connect. Linking words such as “Example,” “main reason,” and “overall view” are used, but they do not consistently clarify relationships. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and connect each reason to its explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “railway lines,” “train tickets,” “public transport,” and “bus station,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations that strain understanding. Phrases such as “very best railway lines,” “ultimate poors people,” and “not successable projects” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “expend money” is also used where a more suitable expression is needed. Spelling errors, including “facilty” and “utitlize,” further reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate transport and investment phrases, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to express opinions and give reasons, but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “Some people think spend large money” lacks a correctly formed verb pattern, while “I agree with the opinion upgrade the public transport helpful for citizen” is missing grammatical links and has unclear clause structure. Problems with articles, plurals, agreement, and punctuation also appear in phrases such as “train station are build” and “people are easy move.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with “because,” “while,” or “which.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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