Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's world many of countries spend a lot of money on the new projects of railway lines. They established new policies to consuming less time and also provide comfortable services to the public. Some of policies company decided to give better transport in the fact of new projects.

In addionally, many countries spend a lot of money on new projects and railways lines. The fast train projects consumed less time people can reach to their destination without wasting time . In my example, metro trains are so fast we reach with in 45 minutes from one station to another station without spend 2 hours travel through loacl trains. In china numbers of fastest trains are travelling for public from one place to another place . This is so benefical for public and make it easiar to travel.

Secondlly, public transport which is also working for public benefits. But their is nessessory to giving best services to improve their condition and prices. Public transports are really well for every citizen but on shortage of transport people face some difficulties to travel with that . Huge number of people are travelling on the same time but trains are less and the number of people increasing day by day . From my prespective, it shuold be improve and provide best services to all people .

In my opinion, spending large ammount on new railways projects must be benefical for the public. Because, it taking less time people can travel easily . New railways projects are so fast and comfortable for travel and its gave a new moderen looks . Spending money to improving public transport is not long lasting idea it can be face same troble for travelling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both options and give a clear preference for new railway projects, so the response addresses the main parts of the question. The example comparing a metro journey of 45 minutes with a two-hour local-train trip helps illustrate the time-saving benefit. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for improving existing transport is mainly that trains are overcrowded and services are insufficient, while the benefits of upgrading those services are not explained in detail. Your claim that improvement is “not long lasting” is also asserted rather than supported. Develop both sides with specific consequences or examples, and explain why your preferred investment is more beneficial overall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph on fast trains, one on existing public transport, and a conclusion. This makes the two views identifiable. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and the introduction repeats the idea of spending money on new projects without establishing the debate or your position. Linking phrases such as “In addionally” and “Secondlly” are inaccurate, while repeated references to “new projects” and “public” make the writing feel repetitive. Some sentences are also loosely connected, particularly the claims about fast trains and modern appearance. Use a clearer thesis, organise each paragraph around one main reason, and connect examples explicitly to that reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “railway lines,” “public transport,” “destination,” and “services,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “projects of railway lines,” “in the fact of new projects,” and “new moderen looks.” Spelling errors, including “benefical,” “easiar,” and “prespective,” are noticeable and sometimes slow the reader. Aim for more precise transport-related expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, describe “high-speed rail projects,” “improved service frequency,” or “reduced journey times” rather than relying repeatedly on “new projects” and “fast.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the comparison between metro and local trains communicates a relevant example. However, the range of structures is limited, and attempts at longer sentences often contain frequent errors that can make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “many of countries spend,” “The fast train projects consumed less time people can reach,” and “it can be face same troble.” There are recurring problems with articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence boundaries; for instance, “it taking less time people can travel easily” needs a clear subject and a correctly formed verb. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a subordinate clause, then check punctuation and verb forms.

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