Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In a different countries, it is considered that some people believe that is important to spend a large amount of money on constructing a new railway roads for very fast trains in between cities, others argue that money be spent on maintaining existing public transport. In this essay i will discuss both views and give my own opinion.

On one hand, many people believe it is necessary to spend money on constructing new railway lines because it is very convenient for the people to traveling in different cities as the train is fast people reached to their destinantion very easily. Firstly, railways paly a crucal role in our cities because many people prefer to travelling in trains for long journey, as if the railway lines are constructed properly people reached in a less time. Secondly, government should promote a compaign for new railway lines as it provide many benefits for residents. For instance, if the railway lines are well organized it reduced any damage of trains and also saves a time because if the trains reached there in 4 hours and then it reached in 2 hours.

On the other hand, others believe that money should be spent on public transport as public transport is very beneficial for everyone. For instance, if money should be spent on public transport it provides a lot of benefits for the job workers and students. Likewise, many students used publib transport for going to schools and universities.However, it also has benefits to our environment it reduces pollution and air quality is good because less amount of gas emmison is spread. Moreover, government should improve public transport in your earlier convinence.

In my opinion, public transport is usefull for everyone and government should provide and improve public transport in our country becase it has many benefits.

In conclusion, both should play a key role in our country and both

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion and state a preference for improving public transport, so the response is relevant to the task. The public-transport paragraph gives reasons involving students, workers and pollution, while the railway paragraph mentions faster journeys. However, the position is only briefly explained, and several points remain general or unclear. For example, the claim that new lines prevent train damage is not clearly connected to the case for high-speed rail, and the comparison between four hours and two hours is unfinished. The conclusion also stops before completing its final point. Develop each view with a clear explanation and a specific, relevant example, then make your own preference and its reasons consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” an opinion paragraph and a conclusion. These divisions help readers identify the two views. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and linking expressions sometimes create relationships that are not clear. “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “For instance,” and “Moreover” are used, but the ideas following them are often repetitive or loosely connected. The final sentence, “both should play a key role in our country and both,” is incomplete, which leaves the essay without a finished conclusion. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, explain it in sequence, and use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “railway lines,” “public transport,” “pollution” and “environment,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “benefits” and “people.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “destinantion,” “crucal,” “publib” and “emmison,” as well as unnatural phrases like “railway roads” and “promote a compaign.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Build a more accurate set of transport-related collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “high-speed rail lines” rather than “railway roads,” and describe how public transport can “reduce emissions” rather than saying gas is spread.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “if” and “as.” This shows an effort to explain reasons, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “some people believe that is important,” “people to traveling,” and “it reduced any damage,” where sentence structure, verb forms or agreement are faulty. Articles and plurals are also unreliable, as in “a different countries” and “a less time.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention too: there is no space after the full stop in “universities.However,” and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and verb forms, and check each sentence for a complete subject and main verb before adding complex clauses.

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