Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals believe that it is important to spend large amount of money on building new railway lines for fast transection between cities, while others argued that the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. It can make certain city of people benefits, but this essay agrees with the latter option because there are numerous transports in bad condition.

Constracting new railway lines between cities provides several opportunities such as people can transport one places to other places more easily. They do not need to wait for long time for traffic congestion. Even people from living in different cities can come to work more quickly. For instance, In italy, from venich to padova, people can come to work in a short time because of the first train services. However, even though there are some benefits but i believe that Government should focus on the public transport.

There are several transports thar are in bad condition. Goverment should focus on that transport by improving engines. Those vehicals that are in bad condition they should replace with new ones and refublished the old ones. Moreover, people uses public transportation more than trains. Consequently, more people will benefits. For example, there are several buses in bangladesh that seats are not in good condition. Government should take the responsibilites replace the seats with new ones. As a result, public will feel more comfortable while seating and taking buses.

In conclusion, Constructing new railway can provides fast way transport between cities, i firmly believe that money should spend excisting ones because people uses public transport rather than trains.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both options and state a clear preference for improving existing public transport, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The examples of faster travel between Venice and Padua and uncomfortable bus seats in Bangladesh help make the views relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the benefits of new railways are mainly about speed, while the case for improving transport focuses on vehicle condition and comfort. The claim that more people use public transport than trains is not explained or supported, and the conclusion repeats your preference rather than drawing the comparison together. Develop each side with clearer reasons and explain how your examples support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This makes the overall line of argument easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “Consequently” to signal relationships between ideas. At times, though, cohesion is mechanical or unclear. For example, “However, even though there are some benefits but” combines contrasting forms unnecessarily, and “Those vehicles that are in bad condition they should replace” has unclear referencing and sentence structure. The conclusion also repeats the introduction without adding a clear synthesis. Use simpler, accurate links and make the connection between each example and its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “railway lines,” “traffic congestion,” “public transportation,” and “engines,” so the reader can understand the main subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make the writing less precise. Examples include “transection” for travel or transport, “Constracting” for constructing, “refublished” for refurbished, and “seats” where you likely mean bus seating. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “people from living in different cities” and “fast way transport.” Aim to learn common collocations for transport and infrastructure, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the comparison without relying on repeated general terms such as “people” and “transport.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a concession with “even though” and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “As a result.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “people uses” should have a plural verb, while “new railway can provides” combines incompatible verb forms. In “Those vehicles that are in bad condition they should replace,” the clause is duplicated and the intended subject is unclear. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “i” and “In conclusion, Constructing.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause first, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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