Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is undeniable that in this modern era public transport become bid problem to peoples. In the regard some people think to necessary to spend large money on constructing new railway lines. This essay will be outline not only the both views but also my opinion which is in favor of former point of view in forthcoming fragments with logical conclusion.
To commence with ,to spent large money on railways lines which make the fast metro trains which reduces the time of travel for long distance.
Firstly is high speeding train. to explain it is because it reduce the travel time between the long distance cities which allows passengers comfortably travel by which improve in business and tourism. for example Shinkansen in japan. Another one is that railway is eco friendly by a road transport. To clarify it car and buses produces more pollution which affect the climate change but trains will be generally on electricity which does not produces pollution.
However, some people believes that government spent also on public transport.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both views, the discussion is severely underdeveloped. The second viewpoint is introduced but left almost entirely unexplored, and the conclusion is missing. The position is stated in the introduction, but the lack of depth and the failure to complete the task mean that the response is only partially addressed. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with more detailed explanations and examples, and ensure all parts of the prompt are fully covered.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, using basic transition signals like 'To commence with' and 'However'. However, the paragraphing is problematic; the second paragraph is fragmented, and the final paragraph is incomplete. The progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of content. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the overall structure is not fully developed. To improve, focus on creating clear, balanced paragraphs that each contain a topic sentence, supporting evidence, and a concluding thought, ensuring a smooth flow between ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and collocation. For example, 'public transport become bid problem' should be 'public transport has become a big problem', and 'in the regard' is an incorrect phrase. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. There are also issues with basic spelling and word formation, such as 'to spent' instead of 'spending'. To improve, focus on learning collocations and expanding your vocabulary related to transport and infrastructure, while paying closer attention to word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('car and buses produces'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with errors in basic syntax. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms, and the use of articles. Practicing the construction of complex sentences will also help you move toward a higher band score.
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