Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The growing influence of food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result has sparked various debates. This issue is particularly significant because its impact affects both individuals and communities in multiple ways. in this essay, I will discuss the positive and negative aspects of and give my opinion.
On the one hand, supporters of allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters and family and clothes very matter children personality. The food matter health care very very important, that it promotes innovation, creativity and access to a wide range of opportunities. This is also evident development and collective progress. improving understanding, tolerance, and problem-solving method in society.
On the other hand, supporters for children to make decisions about matter on mother and father. The children are choose fast food, expensive clothes or video game instead of health food and useful activities. The need children parents, fastfood not allow in home and no effect health care. for example, children choise brand clothes and other.
children favourite clothe famous and choise home eat are not allow fast or other foods. in a conclusion, both views have their own merits. However, I believe that children limited freedom to while parents is the better better approach.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to address the prompt entirely. The essay discusses children's choices regarding food and clothing, whereas the task asks for a discussion on railway infrastructure versus public transport investment. Because the essay is completely off-topic and fails to address the prompt, it cannot be scored higher than a 3.0. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which further limits the development of any relevant ideas. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt to ensure your content is relevant to the specific topic provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often incoherent. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the abrupt transitions between sentences like 'The food matter health care very very important'. The lack of a clear central theme makes it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to link your ideas logically and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. Many words are used incorrectly, such as 'matter' in 'family and clothes very matter children personality', which obscures the intended meaning. There is no evidence of the ability to use less common lexical items or precise collocations. The frequent repetition of basic words like 'children', 'food', and 'clothes' indicates a very restricted range. To improve, you should practice learning word families and collocations in context, and focus on using more precise terminology related to the topic of public infrastructure.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly inaccurate throughout the text. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order, such as 'The children are choose fast food' and 'children favourite clothe famous and choise home eat are not allow'. These errors are systematic and frequently impede communication, making the text difficult to understand. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of auxiliary verbs, correct verb forms, and basic punctuation before attempting more complex structures.
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