Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era, public transport need to be improve, so many people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on constructing new railway lines, especially in cities. Others consider that money should be spent on developing existing public transport. This essay will discuss both perspectives before explaining why i believe that spending money on various public transport is equally important .

On the one hand, it is a good idea to spend large sums of money on new railway lines because it makes public transport more frequent and economic. People travel easily to cities anytime and economically and purchase goods or visiting loved ones. As a result, it helps to improve people's quality of life. Moreover, it is also help to reduce traffic congestion in urban areas. For instance, government constructed new metro line in delhi, which help people to commute everyday also, it encourages more people to use trains instead of private vehicles.

On the other hand, the other types of public transport are also equally crucial to spend money on. As, if only trains are developed, so more people prefer to use them and they may become overcrowded. Hence, buses and lorries are also

important to be [crossed out] improve .furthermore, government should improve the facilities in public transport such as maintain cleanness and hygine [crossed out] more comfortable seats and frequent service. consequently, more people [crossed out] can encourage to use public transport according to their destination.

From my perspective, Although increasing railway lines in towns helps people to use them frequently and comfortably .But other public services are also equally important to reduce the problem of overcrowd [crossed out] and infection, it also helps to reduce the level of [crossed out] air pollution.

To conclude, constructing new railway lines help individuals to travel economically and easily but we [crossed out] can not overlook other public transport are also essential to develop because it encourages people to use them, as instead of [crossed out] personal vehicles and reduce various problems such as conflict and overcrowd.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding 'buses and lorries' is underdeveloped, and the mention of 'infection' in the conclusion is a new, unsupported point that was not introduced in the body paragraphs. While the prompt is addressed, the supporting examples, such as the Delhi metro, are brief and lack depth. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear explanations and relevant, detailed examples that directly support the main argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly misused, such as the sentence starting with 'As, if only trains are developed'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal structure of the paragraphs needs more refinement to ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is a reliance on basic terms like 'good idea', 'important', and 'help'. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as using 'economic' when 'economical' or 'cost-effective' was intended, and 'overcrowd' instead of 'overcrowding'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring correct word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'public transport need to be improve'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'government constructed' instead of 'the government constructed'), and punctuation errors, particularly the misuse of full stops before conjunctions like 'But'. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for verb tenses would be highly beneficial.

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