Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Mostly countries economy depends on transportation like trains,buses,truck and many other way to used and transpot different things, By and large countries use faster tarins for transportation like china, USA , Dubai, and many developed counterys .

Generally countries used old structure of railway lines like pakistan,india,srilanka and a lot of. Rich countries spends a lot number of amount to bulid a new structure for trains to go faster, some people thought it is very needed that time because the rate of popluation world wide rise so the rdeveloped countries constructing the new railways lines and they conact small cities .If live in littile town people come on a one big platfrom then the crowed increasand could not manage by the goverment , so they build new to divied the crowed.

On the other hand some Consider its not necessary to Expand the railyway lines and use older ,they thought the spend money on this old infarastructure and develped batter condition , like pakistan and india both not Invest to make new raliway lines and use on faster trains. The popluation of bothes countries in a huge number of live so mostly people use public transport . In past years many accident were heppend many people are dides.Goverment still use oild frame of railway lines and spend big amount of money on this .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally, as it falls short of the required 250-word minimum, containing only 224 words. The student attempts to discuss both views regarding fast trains versus upgrading existing public transport and provides a brief opinion, but the ideas remain very limited and under-developed. Examples given, such as mentioning various countries like Pakistan, India, and China, are superficial and lack proper expansion or support. The position of the writer is somewhat unclear due to the fragmented nature of the arguments and the lack of a fully structured conclusion. To move to a higher band, the student must write at least the minimum word count and fully develop each part of the prompt with coherent supporting arguments and specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay displays some basic organization with discernible paragraphs, but information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner. There is a lack of clear overall progression, and the transitions between sentences and ideas feel abrupt and disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, making the text difficult to follow at times. For instance, sentences like 'Generally countries used old structure of railway lines like pakistan,india,srilanka and a lot of' disrupt the flow of logic. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion needs significant improvement. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to use a wider range of cohesive devices accurately and ensure a logical, seamless progression of ideas throughout the entire essay.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally strain the reader's understanding. Examples of lexical limitations include 'transpot', 'tarins', 'counterys', 'bulid', 'popluation', and 'infarastructure'. The student relies heavily on simple words and struggles to use less common vocabulary accurately, leading to unnatural collocations such as 'spend a lot number of amount'. To improve to a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range, learn correct word forms, and pay closer attention to spelling and precise word choice suitable for academic writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of basic sentences that are frequently marred by errors. Errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, and punctuation are frequent and often distort the meaning. For example, expressions like 'the rate of popluation world wide rise' and 'many accident were heppend many people are dides' demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical patterns. Complex sentences are rarely attempted, and when they are, they contain persistent errors that cause difficulty for the reader. To reach a higher band, the student must demonstrate better control over simple sentence structures, reduce basic grammatical errors, and incorporate accurate complex sentence forms.

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