Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many region of land, some folks belive that it is important to spend huge stack of money on devloping and extendding new railway tracks for better connections with urban and rural parts. Some part of society still belives that imporving existed transoprt facilities.In my point of veiw both should devloped for growing the nation.

On the hand, people love to travel by using railways and the raily structure is wiedly spreaded in the nations and its commonly used for its economic prices rather then using airlines.Goverment is also working on railways scine they invented beacuse its the best way of transportation and connects with every part.But its very expensive to maintain and need much money to spreed the tracks needs time, land and approvals of tenders.

On the other hand, some folks belvie that improving present tranportaion is more beneficial. its help local peole to move accross the the city easily and helping to reduce the wastin of time. current local transportation help people to reach their work place and helps to dicrease the crowd and traffic presence on the roads.

i completly belives that trasportaion is best way to imporve economy of country and its help so many people either they go for work and go for a vaction with family. so goverment have to look both sector its and important part of daily life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt partially, discussing both the construction of fast railway lines and the improvement of existing public transport while providing a personal opinion. However, the ideas are limited and under-developed, lacking sufficient supporting details or specific examples. Furthermore, the length requirement is not met, as the response contains only 227 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to expand on the arguments with more thorough explanations and examples, while ensuring the minimum word count is achieved.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The text displays some organization with discernible paragraphs addressing different sides of the argument and an introductory and concluding framework. However, there is no clear overall progression throughout the essay. Cohesive devices are used, but they tend to be repetitive or somewhat mechanical, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as abrupt transitions between sentences and paragraphs like 'On the hand' and 'its help local peole'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal logical flow requires strengthening. To improve, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive ties more naturally and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one with clear signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as spelling mistakes ('belive', 'devloping', 'extendding', 'wiedly spreaded', 'scine', 'spreed', 'tranportaion', 'dicrease', 'completly', 'imporve') and word choice inaccuracies ('region of land', 'huge stack of money'). These errors and restricted word choices cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a basic vocabulary range. To achieve a higher band, the student must broaden their vocabulary range, use less common lexical items accurately, and correct frequent spelling and word-formation errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures employed show a limited range, with frequent errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. The writer attempts some complex sentence forms, but these are often faulty, featuring missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'Some part of society still belives that imporving existed transoprt facilities', 'Government is also working on railways scine they invented', and 'so goverment have to look both sector its and important part'. Punctuation is also erratic in places. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of sentence structures with improved control and significantly reduce the frequency of basic grammatical errors.

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