Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
INTRODUCTION:
From my prespective both is good.If working both depends over roots,public transport is working daily and very hour to drive,and the trains waiting for hours and days to reached over distinations.
BODYPARAGRAPH:
From my prespective if goverments makes the new railways and makes the new then better is trains to journey, Then we reached over distination time to time,The if we travels to other cities,goverments makes the new railways and train make new then its benefit over goverments becouse every travel to train and not travel local publics transport.
BODYPARAGRAPH:
From my prespective if public transport better to trains the people travals to the public transport.The makes journey the publics becouse is working compare to the trains,Public transport working daily basis but its drive to slow becouse its driver see any pessenger then its will picked and then agai drive then its taking time to reached over distinations.
OVERVIEWS
From my prespective both is good becouse if goverments makes a new railways and trains travels time to time i think good and also benefits goverments,if goverments didn't makes news railways the make action over local publics transport he gets high charges,so goverments take action over local goverments and drive to easy don't makes more speed
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response addresses the prompt minimally, attempting to discuss both the construction of new railway lines and the improvement of existing public transport while offering a personal opinion. However, the length requirement is not met, as the response contains only 206 words, falling significantly short of the 250-word minimum. The ideas presented throughout the essay are very limited, repetitive, and severely under-developed, making it difficult to discern a fully formed argument. Phrases like 'From my prespective both is good' are repeated without substantial elaboration, meaning the task is only addressed in a very basic and tangential way.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The overall arrangement lacks a clear logical progression. Although the text uses transitional phrases and formulaic openings such as 'From my prespective', these devices are used repetitively and mechanically rather than to build a coherent argument. Paragraphing is attempted with separate sections for the introduction, body paragraphs, and overview, but the internal organization within these sections is weak. Ideas jump abruptly without adequate referencing or smooth linking, causing the reader to struggle in following the progression of thought from one sentence to the next.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'good', 'trains', 'public transport', and 'goverments'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, including 'prespective' instead of perspective, 'distinations' instead of destinations, and 'travals' instead of travels. These lexical limitations and frequent inaccuracies strain the reader's understanding and restrict the expression of ideas to a very elementary level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple and complex sentences. Errors are frequent throughout the text and often distort meaning, such as 'If working both depends over roots' and 'goverments makes the new railways and train make new then its benefit over goverments'. There are persistent problems with subject-verb agreement, prepositions, verb forms, and articles, which cause frequent difficulty for the reader and prevent the formation of reliable sentence structures.
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