Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argue by some people believe that it is necessary to spend large amount of money for railway tracK for fast fast trains between cities.On the other hand people believe that government should be spent on improving existing public transport but I believe that constract new railway for people because fast for provide easy way to go o e cities to other cities and second is really comfortable.

Railway trains are a crucial part of any country.Firstly, people believe that government should spend money on train.As train is a significant role for any government. Take an example of CHINA,Chinese government provide a fast trains for people this really impactful for goverment and government of china earn a 5 million dollar in trains business.Thus,trains are really crucial part of any economy of countries.

Secondly,people believe that the government should spend money on improving existing public transport.As public transport is really significant part of country.For instance of SWEDEN,this government all the old transport to improve and provide a good facility for all the old people. Hence,improvent of existing public transport is really important.

Finally, I believe that fast trains are very significant.AS train is a good part of any countries.SO,I reallly recomended to goverment to improve your trains transport because trains is a beautiful part of any economy of country.

To sum up,trains and public transpot are really crucial. SO, goverment should spend money on trains and public transport because these thing is really important for all the countries and provide a good facility for all old and young people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a clear preference for fast trains in the opening and conclusion, and you mention both proposed uses of public money. However, the discussion only partially fulfils the task because the two views are not compared or explained in enough detail. The China example is intended to support investment in fast trains, but the claim about government earnings is unclear and not connected to benefits for passengers. The Sweden example mentions improving older transport and helping older people, but does not explain what improvements are made or why this is a strong alternative. Develop each side with specific reasons and relevant examples, then explain more fully why your preferred option is better. The response meets the stated length requirement; eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, a statement of your preference, and a conclusion. Basic signposting such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “To sum up” helps readers identify the stages of the answer. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and the links between claims are often mechanical or unclear. For example, “As train is a significant role for any government” does not clearly connect the example to the argument, while “Thus” introduces a conclusion that has not been adequately established. The final preference paragraph also repeats earlier points rather than advancing the reasoning. Use topic sentences that state each argument, then connect explanations and examples explicitly, with clearer referencing and less repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “railway,” “fast trains,” “public transport,” and “government,” so the main topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “really crucial,” “significant,” and “good part.” Inaccurate word choice and collocation sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow, as in “government earn a 5 million dollar in trains business” and “provide a good facility.” There are also spelling errors such as “constract,” “improvent,” and “transpot,” which reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of transport-related expressions and check spelling and word forms. For example, describe passenger benefits, service improvements, and the costs or economic effects of each option rather than relying on general praise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic linking structures, but most sentence patterns are simple, and attempts to combine ideas are often faulty. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “It is often argue by some people believe” combines incompatible structures, while “government should be spent” uses an incorrect passive form. In “Chinese government provide a fast trains,” the subject–verb agreement and article/plural forms are inaccurate. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, with several sentences running together. These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms using “because,” “although,” and “which,” checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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