Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

caMany people believe that it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others people think the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

On the one hand, some people relised that new railway lines for very fast trains betwen cities but this is a do not significant because i think new railway lines is verry expensive and travling are very defficult. Many humans do not like trains but i think childrens like to train, but trains are vesting time of travling. Than neccessaryto spend large sums of money on constructing new railwy lines for not fat trains between cities.

On the other hand, others bellieve the money shuold be spent on improving existing public transport i thing this desigon is good because many public transpot example: bus, car, ven, outo many transport is desining and changing a expensive and comfortable . Than kids going to school and travling te bus, furthermore we trying to bus with improving existing public transport because this is a verry important with children life. Many persons are buying a car, bike, skuti and all people using a public transport with this generation, than in my opinion money should be spent on improvin existing public transport.

In conclusion, i agree with money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Because kids going to school and usingn a public transport.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear preference for improving existing public transport, especially in the conclusion, and you give a basic reason: children rely on it to travel to school. However, the discussion of both views is very limited. The high-speed rail argument is difficult to follow and includes unclear claims such as “trains are vesting time of travling”; the case for improving current services is also mostly a list of transport types rather than developed reasons or examples. The response contains 190 words, so it is 60 words below the required minimum; 48 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain each side with a clear benefit or drawback and support your opinion with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal this basic organisation. However, progression within the body paragraphs is weak: several points are placed together without clear links, and the reader cannot always see how one sentence supports the next. For example, the paragraph about existing transport moves from buses and vans to children, then to people buying cars and bikes. Some linking words, including “Than” and “furthermore,” are repeated or used where the relationship between ideas is unclear. Group related reasons together and use clearer references and transitions to make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use a small set of topic-related words, including “railway lines,” “public transport,” “cities,” and “expensive,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make several ideas hard to understand. Examples include “relised,” “betwen,” “travling,” “defficult,” and “transpot.” Some combinations are also unclear or unnatural, such as “trains are vesting time of travling” and “public transport is desining and changing a expensive and comfortable.” Build a more accurate set of transport-related expressions and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would help you explain costs, convenience, journey times, and service quality without relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to form both simple statements and longer sentences using connectors such as “because” and “furthermore.” This shows an effort to connect reasons, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent, sometimes obscuring meaning. For example, “Others people think” has incorrect agreement, while “new railway lines is verry expensive” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “i agree with money should be spent,” the clause structure is incomplete, and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Practise accurate basic patterns first, especially subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete clauses. Then build longer sentences by joining one clear main idea to a correctly formed reason or example.

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