Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

yes,somw people think spend large amount of money to make a railway lines for trains in the cities there thinking is right these facilities are good for country progress and people comfortable.Trains are carried thousnads of people in one time so they are so helpful for people and make their journey easier.

However,they are comfortable for people and they have so much benefits one of the most important benefit is they took heavy weight and used for transport.the tickets price of trains are very cheap so they are afoardable for common people.For example,if I used the trains journey so country going to progress and government make a new projects and railway lines.

Secondly, I disopointed from these people they believed the money should be spent on improving existing public transport they are wrong.We should spend money on new transport.people attain benefits from new public transport and investment on public transports.

Moreover,my opinion is the public transports like buses,trains and other transport are affordable tickets far common people.For example,people develop their thinking to improve transport so country going to progress.

In conclusion,you should make a good transport of trains they are comfortable and helpful people and its good over country so the think of other people is wrong spend money on existing public transport.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You attempt to discuss both views and state a preference for spending on new transport, with relevant points such as trains carrying many passengers and offering affordable fares. However, the comparison is not clearly developed: the view in favour of improving existing transport is dismissed as “wrong” rather than explained, and the examples do not show how either investment would benefit people or cities. Your own position also shifts, since you support new railway lines but later praise public transport generally. The response contains 203 words, below the required 250; the 10 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop both sides with specific reasons and examples, then state a consistent opinion and support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic paragraph structure, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Secondly,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. The main ideas, though, do not progress clearly: the first two paragraphs repeat the benefits of trains, while the paragraph beginning “Secondly” rejects the opposing view without explaining it. References such as “they” and “these people” are sometimes unclear, and the conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than drawing the discussion together. To improve, give each body paragraph one clear purpose—one for each view—and connect each reason to its explanation or example. Use fewer, more precise transitions and make sure each paragraph advances the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “railway lines,” “public transport,” “affordable,” and “investment,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is narrow and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “people,” “transport,” and “progress.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “heavy weight” for what trains carry and “country going to progress.” Spelling errors, including “somw,” “thousnads,” “afoardable,” and “disopointed,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of transport and policy terms, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe passenger capacity, travel costs, congestion, or service reliability rather than relying on general claims about progress.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate several basic ideas through simple sentences, and you attempt some longer structures, for example, “Trains are carried thousnads of people in one time so they are so helpful.” However, sentence forms are often incomplete or incorrectly joined, and control of verb forms and agreement is inconsistent. Examples include “some people think spend” and “they took heavy weight,” where the verb patterns do not express the intended meaning. Articles and plurals are also unreliable, as in “a railway lines” and “one of the most important benefit.” Punctuation and spacing around commas and full stops need attention. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “while,” or “although.”

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