Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Surprisingly, there are some kinds of persons who thought about their beneficial way of their current issues.Some think that spending large amount of money can help railway tracks to construct it in a good shape for the betterment of train speed.While, other think that the money should be spent on public transport for the easiet way of travelling.

From the one down side,Train has a specific amount of arrival time.People have to wait in the stations and most of their time had usually waste in such situation, if train arrives on the exact time. but, their track was not usefull.Most of the time,people have to travel from other sources of transport.the major and significant problem of investing money on track lines was that Occasionally,In some cities.they were in a very crucial state.So,we should have to look out this situation. From the other positive side,transports needs a lot support people had managed their time by travelling through buses,taxi and local vans. They are time savage technique. But unfortunaly,the conditions of our roads were not good. It is our moral duty to spend a huge amount on roads for the betterment of our society. Now a days.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You refer to both options—building fast railway lines and improving public transport—and mention concerns about waiting for trains and poor road conditions. However, the discussion does not clearly explain the benefits of either investment, and the points about train tracks being “not usefull” and transport being a “time savage technique” are difficult to interpret. Most importantly, you do not give a clear answer to which option you support, so the task’s request for your own opinion is not fulfilled. The response is also 55 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop reasons or provide a relevant example. State your position directly, explain both sides with specific reasons, and support your view with an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction and two body paragraphs, and phrases such as “From the one down side” and “From the other positive side” signal a change of viewpoint. However, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from train arrival times to track quality and then to other transport without clearly connecting these points. The second shifts from buses and taxis to road conditions and a moral duty to fund roads. Some linking expressions are awkward or do not show the relationship between ideas clearly. Use one paragraph for each view, begin with a clear main point, and connect each explanation and example directly to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “railway tracks,” “public transport,” “stations,” and “roads,” and you try to express evaluation with phrases such as “significant problem” and “betterment of our society.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear, which makes several ideas hard to understand. For example, “time savage technique” appears to mean a way to save time, while “some kinds of persons” is an unnatural way to introduce people’s views. There are also spelling errors such as “easiet,” “usefull,” and “unfortunaly.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations such as “high-speed rail,” “improve existing services,” and “reduce journey times,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “if train arrives on the exact time.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly formed, and punctuation makes boundaries unclear. For example, “some people think that spending large amount of money can help railway tracks to construct it” has an unclear subject and verb pattern; “other think” also lacks agreement, and “their time had usually waste” has an incorrect verb form. Several sentences begin with “While” or “but” without being joined appropriately to the surrounding sentence. Practise forming complete subject–verb clauses, using consistent verb forms, and separating sentences with full stops. These changes will make your meaning easier to follow.

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