Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illlustrate the process how some equipement used to generate electricity.
Overall, the diagram display a extreme difficult and challenging methods for produce electricity. This process need four steps and many equipment to reach the final step to successed and these are Cold water, The injection wall, Condeser, generator, Turbine and so on.
There are need cold water to pumped down approximately 4.5 kilomiters and store it in the injection wall. In this step the water are driven in the Geothermal zone and becoming hot in the production wall. Condenser comes next for pumped up the hot water and and store, More specificallyn, in this process condenser driven the water to the last and final round. Furthermore, when the water turned into steam and goes to The turbine and generator then electricity are ready to supply the Geothermal power plant.
In conclusion, it can be stated that the hole process in one of the complicated and long turm process.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to describe the geothermal energy process, but it fails to accurately report the main features. The description of the process is confusing and contains factual inaccuracies, such as stating that the condenser pumps water down or that the injection wall stores water. The overview is also problematic, as it describes the process as 'extreme difficult and challenging,' which is subjective and not an objective summary of the diagram. To improve, you must focus on objectively describing the stages shown in the visual, ensuring that the sequence of events is logical and factually aligned with the provided diagram.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear referencing and awkward transitions. For example, the phrase 'More specificallyn' is used incorrectly, and the connection between the condenser and the turbine is poorly explained. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, which makes the text difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using linking words more naturally and ensuring that each sentence clearly follows from the previous one to create a smooth flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and often inaccurate. There are several spelling errors, such as 'illlustrate', 'equipement', 'Condeser', and 'long turm'. Furthermore, word choices are often inappropriate for an academic report, such as using 'successed' instead of 'succeed' or 'the hole process' instead of 'the whole process'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the technical process clearly. You should focus on learning specific terminology related to energy production and practice using these words in correct contexts to improve your precision and avoid basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'The diagram illlustrate' and 'the water are driven'. Sentence structures are often fragmented or incorrectly constructed, for instance, 'There are need cold water to pumped down'. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are frequently faulty. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that verb tenses are used consistently throughout the report.
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