Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates how geothermal energy is used to produce

current

the process have complete 5 stages each stage perform the different functional program.

First Stages starts form the closed counter with the cold water later on the the cold water have been dumped down toward the downside nearly with the 4.5 kilo meters.

The Second stage starts after the completion of the first stage the cold water is given to the injection well passes will the geothermal zone (hot rocks ) this process is used to heat the water ,from one end the cold water goes in from other end we get the hot water .

In the third stage it used to collect the hot water from the geothermal zone the hot water pumped to the certain height of kilo meter.

In the fourth stage the hot water is collected in the condenser of the container where it has the pipe on the top to pass the steam from it ,this process known as turbine (which is powered by steam).

In the five stage the steam goes in the generator which is used to powered by turbine and produces the electricity,later on the electricity pass to the poles .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the geothermal energy production process, from the injection of cold water to the generation of electricity. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the process as a whole. While the key features are identified, the explanation of the 'turbine' and 'generator' stages is slightly confused, as the text suggests the turbine is a process rather than a component. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introductory summary of the overall process and focus on describing the flow of energy and materials more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into a series of stages, which helps the reader follow the sequence. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on phrases like 'In the first stage', 'In the second stage', and so on. Paragraphing is also problematic, as the text is presented as a single block rather than distinct paragraphs for the introduction, body, and summary. The logical progression is present, but the lack of varied linking words and proper paragraph structure limits the flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate to describe the process, but it is limited and occasionally imprecise. For example, 'functional program' is an unnatural collocation in this context, and 'dumped down' is too informal for an academic report. There are also issues with word choice, such as using 'current' in an unclear way at the start. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise technical terminology related to energy production and avoid informal or vague phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the process have complete'), article usage ('the cold water'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to read at times. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly impacts the clarity of the report. Focusing on sentence boundaries and basic verb forms would greatly improve the quality of your writing.

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