Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

People have different opinons about whether allowing children on everday tasks or allowing on importants tasks. Some individuals believe that allowing children to make their own selections on everyday tasks such as food or clothes or other in society is important , whereas other argue that better for children to make decisoin about matter that affect them only. In my opinon Second argue is better that is children to make decision that affect them is important because of child mind set in this age is not properly set or ready to make every decision properly due to less expereince or age.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the topic and give a position: you say that children should make decisions about matters affecting them, while noting the view that they should choose everyday things. However, the discussion is only introduced, not developed. There are no reasons or examples explaining either view, and the claim that a child’s mindset is not ready for every decision is left unclear and unsupported. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally. It also contains 93 words, below the required 250; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. To improve, explain both perspectives with specific examples, then support your own view and conclude clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic progression: it introduces the two positions and then states which one you support. The contrast signalled by “whereas” helps the reader recognise that two views are being presented. However, the ideas remain in a single paragraph and are compressed into one long sentence, so the relationship between the views and your own reasoning is not clearly developed. The phrase “Second argue is better” also makes the reference to the second position difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the opposing views and your opinion, and connect each reason to an example with clear referencing. This would create a more coherent overall arrangement.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “make their own selections,” “everyday tasks,” and “decisions about matters that affect them.” These phrases show that you can express the central subject, but the range is narrow and several spelling and word-choice errors make the wording less clear, such as “opinons,” “everday,” “importants,” and “decisoin.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “other in society” and “child mind set.” Aim to use accurate forms and more natural collocations, such as “everyday choices,” “important decisions,” and “a child’s maturity.” Building a wider set of topic-specific terms would help you explain the arguments more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using a subordinate clause and contrast, for example, “whereas other argue that…” and “because…”. This shows some effort to move beyond short, simple statements. However, the response relies on one extended sentence with several grammatical problems, and the intended relationships are sometimes hard to follow. In “other argue,” the subject and verb do not agree; “better for children” is missing a subject and verb; and “is better that is children to make decision” has an unclear clause structure. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “make decision.” Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using clauses such as “because” and “although.”

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