Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people often disagree on which matters children should be allowed making decisions of their own. Some people believes making choices on everyday matters help their individuality. Whereas, other thinks children should make decisions about matters that affect them. This essay will discuss both views and I believe

On the one hand, allowing children to make their own choices on everday matters createa a sense of accomplishment among them. If they are allowed to decide what to eat, what to wear and where to go, this will build confidence in them. They will feel that their decisions have value, which will help them to shape their personality and foster their personal development. For exmaple, children are given authority to decide how to allocate their time learns how to manage things on time. Even if they failed to manage, it will give a lesson on how to deal with poor management.

On the other hand, society that believes if children have the authority to make decisions that affect them will harm their personality as whole. They think children are immature and have no ability to take a right decision. For example, if children is allowed to eat what they want, they will always choose junk foods over helathy foods. This will ultimately harm their physical health. Even if they are allowed to chose entertainment especially in today's time. They will always chose video games and mobile games. This will reduce the physical interaction with others and stops personal development as physical games are very important to make a child grow.

In my opinion, children should be given a right to make their own decisions but in a balanced way. Giving right doesn't mean that a parent or a teacher will not support them or will not keep an eye on them. They can be allowed to do what they can but limit can be applied or a reward based technique can be used. For example if a child will eat 6 days healthy food, they will be rewarded with junk food.

In the conclusion, while unrestricted choices can risk the growth of a child in a way that they will only thinks of them selves. Prohibiting them to not make choices on their own also harms their critical thinkign and problem solving skills in future. Therefore, a balance in both is very crucial in earlier age of a child.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear position: children should make choices “in a balanced way.” The examples about food, clothing, time management, and entertainment are relevant, and the conclusion returns to the tension between independence and guidance. However, the discussion is uneven and some reasoning is unclear. The first view is supported with confidence and personal development, while the opposing view is presented mainly as what “society” believes, rather than being explained as a distinct argument about children’s choices. The claim that children choosing for themselves will harm their personality also needs qualification. Develop each side more fully and explain how parental guidance can preserve choice while preventing harmful decisions. The response meets the stated length requirement; eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, an opinion paragraph, and a conclusion. “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In my opinion” help signal the stages of the argument, and the examples generally follow the points they illustrate. However, progression is sometimes weakened by unclear or awkward links. The opening ends with “I believe” but does not complete the thought, and the second body paragraph begins by attributing a view to “society” without clearly connecting it to the task’s opposing position. Some sentences also combine several ideas without showing their relationship clearly. Use a complete thesis in the introduction, make the topic sentence of each body paragraph explicit, and connect examples to the claim they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “sense of accomplishment,” “foster their personal development,” “allocate their time,” and “critical thinking and problem solving skills.” These phrases help express ideas beyond basic statements. However, word choice and spelling are inconsistent, and some expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “make decisions of their own,” “take a right decision,” and “authority to decide.” There are also spelling errors, including “everday,” “exmaple,” “helathy,” and “thinkign,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general terms such as “things” and “do what they can” with precise descriptions would also make the argument clearer and more formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If they are allowed to decide…” and a concession with “Even if.” Most of the main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “Some people believes” and “choices … createa”; there are also errors in “if children is allowed” and “they will always thinks.” The opening contains an incomplete sentence ending “I believe,” and the conclusion’s opening clause, “while unrestricted choices can risk…,” is not properly connected to the main clause. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention. Review agreement, complete each sentence, and check punctuation when joining contrasting ideas; greater accuracy across these structures would strengthen the response.

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