Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It can be argued by some individuals that teenagers should independent on their own choice on each day matters like food, clothes and entertainment is as a result in a community of people who only argue regarding their own wishes. Other people think that it is indispensable for teenagers to make decisions about matters that affect them. This essay will discuss both views. I believe that children should leave on the decision what they make because they learn about practical life and in future they can make good and bad decisions.

On the paradoxical side, children should give them right to make decision on the practical life because they will made decision about their own problems in the upcoming decades, and they might be success in the decision they made. Also it is really crucial for teenagers to take decisions, however their may no need of any kind of person to taught them what is good and what's not because they were learn the decision who to make. For instance, nowadays parents are left their children regarding education because each one want to select the field which one is my favorite, so this is the big change for children who make choices for themselves.

One the other hand, some are want to that only for those teenagers who can think about their own wisher. Although is vital for those who make a decisions to make them selfish and desire. While in society their parents and relative have to give them opportunity for making decisions because they become more selfish and they achieve their desires. For example, in today life in our community gardenias give authority for their children to take choice and they are expected that they are much selfish.

In conclusion, I believe that it is vital for children to make decisions about their daily life matters because they prepare themselves for future as well as can made difference between good and bad decision, however people are fell selfish and obtain their desire.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides and state a preference for children making choices, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partial: the concern that children may become self-centred is mentioned, but its reasoning is unclear and the example about “gardenias” does not explain how everyday choices lead to selfishness. Your supporting example about choosing an education field is more relevant, but it is not developed to show the benefits or limits of children’s autonomy. The position also becomes difficult to follow in places, especially where you say children should make decisions but then describe this as making them selfish. Explain each view accurately, develop a specific example for each, and state your opinion consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “On the other hand” help indicate a change of view. However, there is no clear progression within the argument: several sentences repeat that children should make decisions without adding a distinct reason, and the opposing paragraph is difficult to follow. For example, “Although is vital for those who make a decisions to make them selfish and desire” does not clearly connect to the preceding point. Some linking phrases are also inaccurate or mechanical, including “On the paradoxical side” and “One the other hand.” Organise each body paragraph around one clear claim, explain it, and then give an example that directly supports it; use simpler, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary suited to the topic, including “indispensable,” “practical life,” and “make decisions,” and you refer to relevant areas such as education and daily choices. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning hard to understand. Examples include “independent on their own choice,” “their own wisher,” and “gardenias give authority,” where the intended meaning is unclear. Repetition of “decision” and “selfish” also limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check how words combine: for instance, use “make their own choices,” “become self-centred,” and “give children the opportunity to decide.” Choose examples whose wording clearly identifies the people and actions involved.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use clauses with “because,” “although,” and “while,” but complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some ideas difficult to interpret. For example, “they will made decision” has an incorrect verb form, while “their may no need” and “they were learn” show problems with sentence construction and tense. There are also errors in articles, plurals and agreement, as in “make a decisions” and “some are want.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention as well. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms, especially after modal verbs such as “will” and “might.”

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