Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I do agree with the people who think that its very important that children make decisions about matters that affects them because that is excatly how they are going to learn from thier mistakes and adapt quickly. We usually think that the society and adults who make decision are always right and their decsions are decisive and they are protecting thier children which is not true at all. Because of spooning them, this becomes a comfortable cage for the children and are very easily dependant onto thier elders . And a resultant they're afraid to take any risk or chanllges they face and choose a very easy pathway out. Children are not here to validate everything what the society is telling them to do. At some point of thier life they have to live alone or to lead a life with someone else. Its necessary for them to conquer their own thinking, thier decsions and move into the direction they want to choose. That doesnt necessarily mean that they are thinking about thier own wishes . They have to khow whats right and wrong for them. This helps to create thier alignment issues if they have any. I do agree at some part the elders should take decsions for them too but not for long so that they khow whats right and whats useful for them and can guide them better. Then its for them to decide if they want to go with thier decsion or not. Ive been living in a city with my parents for 20 years. My parents were the ones who were taking decsions for me. It felt like rigid cage. This created confusion and had doubts about my own way of thinking and pursuing life. I even didnt khow how to book a cab or wasnt unable to travel, buy clothes of my own choice. This created the lack of confidence in me which i was very ashamed of. But after moving out to another city till now, its 6 years, ive been living all alone by myself. I now do all my chores alone. i khow how to tackle any stranger which comes as an obstacle for me. I can proudly say im independant, taking all the decsions by myself. Regained my confidece level to sky which im very proud of.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your opinion is clear: you support children making decisions because this helps them learn from mistakes and become independent. The personal example about moving away from your parents gives relevant support, especially your account of learning to manage daily tasks. However, the response addresses the two views unevenly. You briefly acknowledge that adults should make some decisions, but do not explain the concern that children may become self-centred or show why supporters of that view hold it. Several claims, such as children needing to “conquer their own thinking,” are also unclear or insufficiently explained. To strengthen the response, present both viewpoints explicitly, develop the opposing argument with a reason or example, and then connect your example more directly to your conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable line of thought: you state your position, explain the value of independence, and then illustrate it with personal experience. The example about living alone is relevant and gives the response a clear central focus. However, ideas are presented in one long paragraph, so the reader has little help distinguishing the discussion of the two views from your own experience and conclusion. Connections between points are sometimes abrupt, and phrases such as “And a resultant” and “This helps to create their alignment issues” do not make the relationship between ideas clear. Organise the response into paragraphs for the opposing view, your position, and supporting example, and use accurate linking phrases to show contrast and cause and effect.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary to discuss independence and decision-making, including “comfortable cage,” “take any risk,” “pathway,” and “lack of confidence.” These choices help communicate your personal experience and show attempts to express more than basic ideas. However, spelling errors are frequent, including “excatly,” “thier,” “decsions,” and “independant,” and some word choices or combinations are unclear, such as “spooning them,” “alignment issues,” and “conquer their own thinking.” These can make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “overprotecting them” rather than “spooning them,” and explain the specific skills or confidence children develop rather than using vague expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and reasons, as in “because that is exactly how they are going to learn from their mistakes,” and you include some longer sentences to explain your experience. However, the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes the meaning hard to follow. For example, “matters that affects them” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Because of spooning them, this becomes a comfortable cage for the children and are very easily dependant” has an unclear subject and faulty sentence structure. There are also problems with articles, tense, and punctuation, such as “I even didnt khow how to book a cab or wasnt unable to travel.” Use shorter, complete sentences where needed, and check agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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