Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some individulas have this mindset that letting children take their own decisions may lead to a selfish society prioritizing their own needs. While others believe that it is beneficial to allow children be independent by letting them decide about matters that affect them.

We will discuss both these views in this essay and give my opinion on it.

The concept of children not capable enough to take their own decisions has been going around for a long time. It is like a culture in many countries that parents decide what type of food, clothes, career or entertaintment is best for their children. According to them, a child who has the freedom to make his own choice will always think about his own wishes above anyone else's in the future.

On the other hand, many people believe that it is important to let a child take his own decision on subjects that concerns him. This builds a confident and decisive personality and may help in the future by choosing between right and wrong choices. I have always been a hesitant and indecisive person when taking any big choices in life because my parents believed that unless im not old enough they will take all the decisions for me. When a person grows up taking many choices by themselves they learn a lot in the process. They know how to cope up with any situation that arises because they have learned it through trial and error.

In conclusion, it is important that a child's choice is taken into consideration while making a decision about him and the parents advice should also be considered as important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a personal position: you explain the concern that children may prioritise their own wishes, then argue that making choices builds confidence and decision-making ability. The personal example about your parents making decisions for you also supports your view. However, the first perspective is mostly reported rather than examined, and the claim that children with freedom will “always think about his own wishes” could be evaluated or qualified. Your conclusion recommends considering both the child’s choice and parental advice, but this compromise is not fully developed or clearly connected to the earlier discussion. Develop each side with a specific example and explain more explicitly how your own position follows from the arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the other hand” helps readers follow the shift in perspective, and the personal example is placed logically within the paragraph supporting children’s independence. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent arrangement and shows some of the clearer progression associated with the next level. To make that progression more consistent, avoid announcing “We will discuss both these views” and instead state your position directly. The first body paragraph also needs a clearer link between parental control and the predicted selfishness. In the final paragraph, explain how parental advice and children’s choices can be balanced, rather than introducing this as a brief closing point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of relevant vocabulary, including “independent,” “confident,” “decisive personality,” and “trial and error.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the response remains understandable. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “matters that affect them,” though some expressions are inaccurate or unnatural: “take their own decisions,” “cope up with,” and “big choices.” Spelling errors such as “individulas” and “entertaintment” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, use “make their own decisions,” “cope with situations,” and “major decisions.” More precise vocabulary would help distinguish everyday choices from consequential decisions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including a contrast clause beginning “While others believe…” and a conditional structure in “When a person grows up taking many choices…”. Most meaning is clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “allow children be independent” needs “allow children to be independent,” and “subjects that concerns him” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence “because my parents believed that unless im not old enough they will take all the decisions for me” has unclear tense and conditional structure; revise it to express the past situation directly. There are also punctuation and sentence-boundary issues in the opening. Practise accurate agreement, infinitive patterns, and tense consistency while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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