Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Own choices for every one is significant thing in life . It help to makes best decision for vital matter . some people are takes good selection in their own matter because they practic in minor age . in this eassy we eloborate both side .

on the one hand some people believe that children have their own choices on diffferent matters like food ,clothes and other activites.this thing is greatful for children because if we allows to work or decided their on thing then they give their full focus and intrests on these matters. They takes some right and wrong decisions on their life and thses selecation give a lesson thay never forget in whole life .Pearents have diffiecult to allow their children to choices thing which they like it.

on the other hand some people realize this offer is not good for children becase if they takes some major decisions, it affect on their life like depression ,stress and bed thing for their parents .some time children chooses serious decision like study , about marriage ,and their favourite things .

According to my propestive ,children are allowing to make own choices like food ,bike,car, friends, and other things , but they not chooses major things about their life .As they result it helps to live better life in their society .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal position: you support children choosing everyday things such as food and friends, while arguing that they should not make major life decisions. However, the discussion is only partial and the position is not fully clear. The first view receives some explanation—that choices can build interest and teach lessons—but the opposing view is asserted mainly through possible “depression” and stress, without explaining how everyday choices might foster selfishness or why parental guidance matters. The examples of study and marriage are also not clearly connected to the question. The response is 27 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop and support the ideas. Explain each view more fully and make your opinion consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “on the one hand,” another beginning “on the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. These signposts help readers identify the two sides. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, the claim that children’s choices can teach lessons is followed by a statement about parents finding it difficult to allow choices, without showing how the points relate. The conclusion introduces examples such as “bike, car, friends” rather than clearly summarising the discussion. Several linking phrases are used mechanically, and references such as “this thing” and “this offer” are not always clear. Develop a logical sequence within each paragraph and use more precise links between claims and explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “choices,” “decisions,” “major,” “depression,” and “society,” and you attempt to express ideas about consequences and responsibility. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “greatful for children,” “their on thing,” and “serious decision” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “beneficial,” “their own matters,” and “important decisions” would be clearer. Spelling errors, including “practic,” “eassy,” “eloborate,” and “Pearents,” are also noticeable. Build a more accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise expressions such as “everyday choices” and “parental guidance” over repeated general words like “thing” and “matter.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including conditional structures such as “if we allows … then they give their full focus” and a contrast introduced by “on the other hand.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “It help to makes,” “some people are takes,” and “children are allowing,” where verb forms and agreement are not controlled. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “a lesson thay never forget” and the run-on punctuation around “life . some people.” Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and use shorter sentences when unsure. Then check each sentence for verb form, agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding more complex structures.

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