Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

It is belived that if children are allowed by their parents to decide autonomously on everyday matters, the society will be damaged since they will be thinking only about their own wishes. Others believe that making decisions on something which is affecting them is fundamental in order to develop their identity. I personally agree with the last perspective because I believe that children should be taught how to be responsible for themselves at a young age.

First of all, some people believe that giving them the possibility to choose will result in a drawback for our society. The reason is linked to the fact that they will be pay attention just to their own needs. For instance, if a child is free to choose between two different meals, he will take the one he likes the most, but if his sister, which is younger, wants the same one, he will refuse to gave it to her since he feels like he has the possibility to choose. From this perspective, it would be negative for the society, but I believe that when their parents give them the right to choose, they should also teach them how to do it properly and fairly.

Therefore, I agree that it is important to let them decide for themselves. This will shape their whole character, helping with their decisional ability, they will be able to balance the outcome of choosing one instead of another one and they will analyse the pros and the cons. For example, when choosing between clothes, they will think about how to combine them, how the temperature is on that day and what they will do during the day.

To conclude, I believe that allowing children to being responsible of their own choices will be a beneficial outcome since they will learn how to behave in our society starting from learning the easiest everyday matters.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear opinion: you support children making choices, provided parents teach them to do so responsibly. The example of choosing a meal and sharing with a younger sister helps explain the concern about self-centredness, while the clothing example illustrates how choices can develop practical judgement. This meets the task well, but the two sides are not equally developed. The argument that choice may encourage selfishness relies mainly on one hypothetical situation, and the benefits of decision-making are asserted more than explored. To strengthen the response, explain more explicitly how parental guidance can foster consideration for others, and extend the benefits with a concrete consequence or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction presents both views and your position, followed by a paragraph for each perspective and a conclusion. The progression from the concern about selfishness to the value of learning responsibility is easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “First of all,” “Therefore,” and “To conclude” make the stages visible, though their use can feel somewhat mechanical. Some connections within sentences are less clear; for example, “This will shape their whole character, helping with their decisional ability, they will be able to…” joins several ideas without a clear grammatical link. Use a wider range of transitions and divide complex points into clearer sentences, while making references such as “this” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including “autonomously,” “fundamental,” “identity,” and “pros and cons.” These choices help communicate ideas about independence and decision-making, and the meaning remains clear throughout. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “a drawback for our society,” “decisional ability,” and “allowing children to being responsible.” There is also a spelling error in “belived.” Aim for more natural academic phrasing and check word forms and spelling during revision. For instance, “decision-making skills” is more idiomatic than “decisional ability,” while “take responsibility for their choices” expresses your conclusion more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including conditional clauses (“if children are allowed…”) and relative clauses (“which is younger”). Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in both longer and shorter sentences. Examples include “they will be pay attention,” “refuse to gave it,” and “allowing children to being responsible”; these require corrected verb forms. The sentence beginning “This will shape their whole character” also runs together separate clauses without appropriate punctuation or a linking structure. Review verb patterns after “will,” “to,” and “allow,” and practise joining clauses accurately. Greater control of these forms would make your varied sentence structures clearer and more reliable.

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