Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Here this topic is about our childriens, some people think if we allow childrens to choice any thing it can make them selfish.But some think it important to allow childrens make their decisions on self.

Here we can see there are two types of people they think about children decisions totally different. There are some people saying allowing childrens make their own choices like in food, clothes and entertainment it can be result to make childriens selfish and yes they are definatily right.It's human sychology when you full fill each wish your child in sense you are allowing for every thing they can choice.This thing will develop in children selfishness because when they will have everything what they want, they will not have emotions or feelings for others need.But in my openion also it one advantage, they can develop them self confident but they can lost emotions as i told earlier.

In the second side people says it's important to give childrens access to make their decision and definilty also according to me it's important for their confident and their good growth.But also it have some effect as i told earlier.

So, both type of people are correct according their thinking, but according to my openion we should make it blance.being parent we better know what is good and what is bad our childrens.So that's whay in some cases we allow childrens to make their decisions even when we also confortabe it will not harmful for him, it also will develop in our children decision making ability and critical thinkind that's why to make decison in some areas onself also good for children.But when we feel it harmful our children it not good then we definatly should stop our child for their benifit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both views and give a personal position: you recognise that unrestricted choice may encourage selfishness, while decision-making can build confidence and independence. Your conclusion also proposes a balance, allowing choices when they are safe. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The claim that children who get what they want “will not have emotions or feelings for others” is broad and is not supported with an example or explanation. The second view is also treated briefly, and the response does not clearly distinguish everyday choices from decisions that require parental guidance. Develop each side with a specific example and explain how your balanced approach would work in practice.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs addressing the two views, and a conclusion that states your position. Linking phrases such as “In the second side” and “So” help signal movement between points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several ideas are repeated, particularly the concern about selfishness and the need to balance parental control. References such as “this thing” and “it” do not always make clear which idea you mean. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s main point, then develop it in a logical sequence. More precise referencing and a wider range of accurate transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “selfishness,” “confident,” “decision making ability,” and “critical thinking.” These terms show an attempt to discuss both possible outcomes and the role of parental guidance. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “allow childrens to choice,” “full fill each wish,” and “make it blance.” Spelling errors such as “definatily,” “openion,” and “benifit” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for discussing autonomy and responsibility, and check spelling and word forms carefully when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional and reason clauses, as in “when we feel it harmful our children it not good then we definatly should stop our child.” This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas, but complex sentences are often faulty and can make the meaning hard to follow. There are frequent problems with sentence structure, verb forms, articles, plurals, and agreement: for example, “it important to allow childrens make their decisions” needs a verb and an infinitive structure, while “people says” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. Punctuation and spacing around sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences with “allow someone to do something” and “if/when” clauses before combining several ideas.

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