Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A large proportion of people believe that allowing childern to make their own choices on daily life matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of people who are selfish.Whereas, other menifest that it is crucial for childern to make decision about matters that affect them. I strongly agree with those who believe that decision making is important for childern as it create sense of responsibilty and independence in them.

In today's challanging world, childern mostly depend on their parents for basic needs and do not even try to do it by themselves. Some individuals believe that by allowing them to make choices in everyday matters will result in group of people who only think about their own wishes. For instance, if child is permissible to choose food of their own choice for everyday he or she will sooner or later develop habbit of junk eating. Moreover, kids are unaware of nutritional value and its health benefits so eating only fancy delicious meals will cause serious health issues among them.

In contrast, from other people prespective decision making has paramount importance for childern. Additionaly, it will promote the child to be responsible and self dependent. For instance, The child will start taking care of their own clothes and organize them before going to school and after they return.

In conclusiom, despite an argument between the groups of people about whether childern's are allowed to make their own choices on everyday matters or not. I strongly believe that they are allowed to make choicies this will strengthen their decision making ability and make them responsible and independent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear opinion that children should make decisions, and you address both views. The concern about food choices is supported with a relevant example about junk food and health, while the opposing view is illustrated through children organising their clothes. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the case for children’s autonomy is brief, and the conclusion mainly repeats your position rather than drawing the discussion together. The response is also one word below the required 250-word minimum; the 23 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop each view with fuller explanation and add a specific example of how making age-appropriate choices can build responsibility.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “For instance,” “Moreover,” and “In contrast” help signal examples and the change in viewpoint. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes limited, and the contrast paragraph contains only a short example before the conclusion. Some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “For instance,” and the opening “Whereas” does not form a complete sentence. Make the relationship between ideas clearer by explaining how each example supports the relevant view, and use a wider range of natural transitions and reference words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “nutritional value,” “health benefits,” “responsibility,” and “independence.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and there are attempts at more formal phrasing such as “paramount importance.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “childern,” “menifest,” “challanging,” and “choicies.” Some expressions are also awkward or imprecise, such as “a group of people who only think about their own wishes” and “promote the child to be responsible.” These issues reduce the accuracy and naturalness of the vocabulary. Check spelling carefully and choose more idiomatic collocations when expressing cause and effect or personal qualities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “if child is permissible” and a contrast between the two viewpoints. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “if child” (missing an article), “will result in group” (missing an article), “decision making … as it create” (subject–verb agreement), and “despite an argument … about whether … or not” (an incomplete sentence structure). There are also problems with plurals and agreement in “childern’s are allowed.” Practise building complete sentences with accurate articles, verb forms, and agreement before adding more complex clauses.

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