Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

A few individual argued that children should be allowed to make their own decisions about everyday matters. while other think that this can make them selfish. however, i believe that children should have freedom to make their own choices because it helps them become independent and responsible.my justification will be provided in the upcoming paragraphs along with the relevant examples.

One of the fundamental reason is that, allowing children to make their own decisions may encourage selfish behaviour . this is because children may focus only on their personal wishes without considering the neeeds of others. for example, if parents allow their children to choose everything they want, they may demand expensive clothes, unhealthy food or excessive entertainment. as a result, they may develop unrealistic expections and find it difficult to adjust to society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—that children should have freedom to choose because this can make them independent and responsible—and you begin to explain the opposing concern with an example about expensive clothes, unhealthy food and excessive entertainment. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the view in favour of children making decisions is not developed beyond the opening claim, and your own position is not supported with a relevant example. The discussion also ends before reaching a conclusion. The response contains 134 words, which is 116 words below the required minimum; this leaves too little space to discuss both views and develop your reasoning. To improve, explain each perspective in a separate developed paragraph, support your opinion with a specific example, and conclude by summarising your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: an opening introduces the two views and your opinion, followed by a paragraph explaining how unrestricted choices might encourage self-centred behaviour. The example beginning “for example” and the result introduced by “as a result” help show a basic relationship between ideas. However, progression is limited because the response stops after developing only one side, and there is no concluding paragraph. Some linking words are used mechanically or with inconsistent capitalisation, such as “while” and “however” after full stops. The opening also promises that justification and examples will follow, but the promised support for your own view does not appear. Build a clearer sequence with one paragraph for each view, then a conclusion, and use transitions to show how each point relates to your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “everyday matters,” “selfish behaviour,” “personal wishes,” “unhealthy food” and “adjust to society.” These choices make the main concern understandable, and phrases such as “unrealistic expectations” show an attempt to express consequences precisely. However, the range is limited by the short response, and several spelling errors reduce accuracy: “neeeds” and “expections.” Some expressions are also imprecise or awkward, such as “A few individual argued” and “make their own decisions about everyday matters” when referring to children generally. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and a broader range for discussing autonomy and responsibility. Proofread spelling carefully, and use more precise terms such as “some people argue” and “develop self-reliance.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms. For example, “this is because children may focus only on their personal wishes without considering the needs of others” uses a subordinate clause to explain a reason, while the conditional example beginning “if parents allow…” adds some structural variety. Meaning is generally understandable, but errors in sentence boundaries, capitalisation and agreement are noticeable. The opening has a fragment-like transition after “matters” (“while other think…”), and “A few individual argued” has a number and verb-form mismatch. Several sentences begin with lowercase words after full stops, and the final sentence runs directly into “my justification” without a space. Work on complete sentence construction, consistent capital letters, subject–verb agreement and punctuation; these corrections will make your ideas easier to follow.

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